|Reviews for The Sleeping Tensai|
| Neko-fire demon tempest chapter 1 . 6/2/2014
Thank you SO SO much for the translation, I was completely lost.
| kim13796 chapter 1 . 6/1/2010
Love this, please continue
| sakuraxgaara2233 chapter 1 . 5/3/2009
write more plz
| xDarklightx chapter 1 . 4/12/2009
I like it.
| KL93 chapter 1 . 7/28/2008
| lupinlovesme chapter 1 . 5/29/2008
you should put translations at thr beginning of the chapters...she seems a bit like a mary-sue...watch out
| darkxXxflames chapter 1 . 5/29/2008
me thinks that the story is really interesting!
| Nasty Evil Dead Dog chapter 1 . 5/28/2008
Your OC sounds like a Mary Sue. And, there are some grammar and punctuation problems. Oh, and Ryuzaki seems quite OOC for calling her and asking for her help and all. And, since the fanfic's language is English, why not try sticking to that?
“gasp gasp” The racket fell from her hands, her chest heaving heavily up and down as she fell pitifully to her knees.
I think it should be like this:
She gasped as the racket fell from her hands. Her chest heaved heavily up and down as she fell pitifully to her knees.
“Michi-chan!” Silvery gray eyes opened and turned lazily toward the person calling her name.
“You have a phone call from Ryuuzaki-san!” gray eyes blinked as she got up, golden brown locks falling from their perch on her shoulders to hang behind her as she moved from her slumped position on the couch.
I think those make her sound like a Sue. Try to not emphasize on her body too much. The fact that she's good at tennis just makes her seem more like one.
Ahh... well... this is not a flame. I just decided to review. Anyway, good luck with your fanfic!