|Reviews for Pharah Jones|
| Owl Emporium chapter 6 . 10/12/2008
Ahh...anyways, this was good. Great job and please update soon. :D
| sandstar08 chapter 6 . 6/4/2008
I like where the plot is going..
Mary-Sue is a term used to describe a new character - typically female - that is added to the regular cast but is mysteriously connected (usually a long lost blood relative unsupported by canon) to the main character. They often end up with extraordinary powers (be they magical, like in Harry Potter, or extra-intelligent, like in most non-fantasy fandoms) and become the crux of whatever group is trying to save the world/do the mission. A lot of newbie writers try to insert a "super" version of themselves into the world they are writing in, and these are called Mary-Sues. Its a derogatory term at times, especially if someone calls your character one; but most reviewers use it to warn authors that they may be straying into "supergirl" territory. Hope that clears that up. If reviews have weird phrases like that, google for a fanfic dictionary; there are quite a few good ones out there that are happy to help. I think has one actually as well...
Good luck! Waiting for the next chapter!
| lurk moar chapter 1 . 6/4/2008
Hahahaha...no. Your writing is good, but wasted on this half-baked plot and Mary-Sue.
| iccle fairy chapter 5 . 6/4/2008
dun-dun-dun indeed! keep it up! can't wait for the attack!
| sandstar08 chapter 5 . 6/3/2008
It was annoyingly short, I agree...
which is why I'm begging for MORE SOON! :) *smiles angelically*
| vesperlynds chapter 5 . 6/3/2008
I like it and I really don't care if things are short or not if they are good like this.
| sandstar08 chapter 4 . 6/2/2008
interesting twist... your greatest hero and the person you worship ends up being your dad... looking forward to seeing more character out of pharah instead of a mary sue approach
| vesperlynds chapter 4 . 6/2/2008
| iccle fairy chapter 3 . 6/2/2008
very exciting cliffie!
| vesperlynds chapter 3 . 6/2/2008
This is getting really good. Keep being awesome.
| Arica Princess of Rivendell chapter 3 . 6/1/2008
Uh-oh three one crying Jones who's a mother and two angry Jones men; this is not going to be a good thing for those that kidnapped Pharah. Well done.
Please update again soon.
| Arica Princess of Rivendell chapter 2 . 5/31/2008
Poor Marion. Please update again soon
| SlothKeeper chapter 2 . 5/30/2008
too much dialog not enough description on what's going on. other than that it's ok
| vesperlynds chapter 2 . 5/30/2008
I loved it. Great update.
| sandstar08 chapter 1 . 5/30/2008
this is interesting... i'm looking forward to reading more of this