Reviews for Leader of the Pack
BrokePerception chapter 26 . 8/15/2010
Good epilogue here.
BrokePerception chapter 25 . 8/15/2010
Awwe... :(
BrokePerception chapter 24 . 8/15/2010
Aww, what tragedy... I just find it funny in a way that you're writing in capitals without exclamation marks behind them. That makes no sense.
BrokePerception chapter 23 . 8/15/2010
Great last line of this chapter. Very catchy. Urges to read more.
BrokePerception chapter 22 . 8/15/2010
You have only one paragraph here in this whole chapter, the rest is just single lines...
BrokePerception chapter 21 . 8/15/2010
Mmm. What's with the underlining and italics again. Easy numbers and small ones should be written in letters, not numbers.
BrokePerception chapter 20 . 8/15/2010
I already thought something odd was going on when chapter 19 read 'chapter 20'. Your 19 is missing, dear. You have got 20 two times.
BrokePerception chapter 19 . 8/15/2010
I would think the nurse would react worse to it.
BrokePerception chapter 18 . 8/15/2010
Don't use capitals unless strictly necessary.
BrokePerception chapter 17 . 8/15/2010
Same issue as before... Your commas are horrid in here.
BrokePerception chapter 16 . 8/15/2010
And why is this underlined and in italics again?
BrokePerception chapter 15 . 8/15/2010
This one doesn't have a chapter title either. I think that you should be consequent with that.
BrokePerception chapter 14 . 8/15/2010
Why doesn't this chapter have a title? :(
BrokePerception chapter 13 . 8/15/2010
Nice chapter title here, it really invited to read more.
BrokePerception chapter 12 . 8/15/2010
Underlined. And I only now realize where you have gotten the names from. Lilly, Lucius,...? HP, no? Well, the Lily from HP was written with just one l.
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