Reviews for Harry Potter and the Better Life
David Fishwick chapter 13 . 2/8/2015
Great and thanks for writing as I enjoyed reading this.
Guest chapter 1 . 10/11/2014
Lets watch this b1tch get what he deserves
Team Major Whitlock chapter 13 . 8/23/2013
I LOVE this story it is AMAZING! Please, please, please write a sequel. Xxx
wandamarie chapter 1 . 5/14/2009
it was a good one thank you on to the next chapter
hedwigs-biggest-fan chapter 13 . 12/17/2008
OOh...Dursley is a great bullying git! I'm glad that Sirius and the rest put him in his place - let's just hope he listens tho.

On to the sequel.
hedwigs-biggest-fan chapter 11 . 12/17/2008
Oh dear...
hedwigs-biggest-fan chapter 10 . 12/17/2008
Pettigrew is a lot worse in your story than in Canon isn't he - you can see why he turned to the Dark Lord.
hedwigs-biggest-fan chapter 8 . 12/17/2008
I'm not sure about those stories about this 'fruity' guy - the stories seem a little bit OOC.
hedwigs-biggest-fan chapter 4 . 12/17/2008
Oh...I bet Remus (it's spelt wrong in your story, by the way) will feel really guilty when he transforms back. He could have killed Harry.
hedwigs-biggest-fan chapter 2 . 12/17/2008
Does this mean Harry is a werewolf now? But he wasn't bitten. I'm not sure how it works...

Sirius questioned why Harry said yes to his ofer...that's good. It still irritates me how the Dursley's treated Harry in Canon.
sami1010220 chapter 5 . 9/30/2008
it's a pretty good fic so far. i just wanted to point out that there are a lot of grammar mistakes. for example, you spelled remus "reamus", and put "vowel" instead of vow. just little things like that. but again, so far it's pretty good. so yeah, i'm gonna keep reading, lol :)
Frankenstitch chapter 6 . 8/27/2008
I can't believe that Ron told Sirius.
SiriusLuver16 chapter 5 . 8/16/2008
I have a couple of notes for you on how you may be able to improve your story.

First, it's spelled REMUS, not REAMUS.

Second, Ron and Hermione are out of character. They don't act this way in the books... This is the way that typical FanFiction Ron and Hermione act, but not the way the JKR Ron and Hermione act.

Third, why would they believe Sirius right away? Without the proof that Petigrew holds, Sirius would be given the kiss on the spot. Even with the proof, there would be a bigger fight put up.

Those are just some of the major things that I noticed. I'd suggest that you revise the story a little bit, and try adding your own twist to the average Sirius gets freed story.

Good luck!

AliceCullen0629 chapter 13 . 8/12/2008
hey this story is REALLY GOOD! can't wait to read the sequel and keep up the good work.
Judaphine chapter 13 . 7/31/2008
the story wasn't too bad, but you need to work on your grammar or get a beta to help tidy things up before even THINKING of posting a sequel
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