Reviews for The Princess Bride
shiro63 chapter 1 . 6/16/2010
i love this story, i wish you would write more!
caithzadz chapter 1 . 7/2/2009
this is cute! please write more!
JustDrinkTea chapter 1 . 12/29/2008
Kawaii! I love it! I would have never been able to think of something like this! Ever. Please please please write more!
TheFanFictionAlchemist chapter 1 . 6/6/2008
*Crack's knuckles*


So, this is FaixOC KuroganexOC. I usually read those because the author's need serious help, and I'm trying to be kind.

Yours wasn't two bad. Grammatically.

AS far as characterization goes, Fai seemed a bit off to me, that he would fall madly in love with this girl, he does have issues. Most of the problem seems to be you are trying to make him fit the role of Westly.

And MarySues. Your little OC girl isn't one yet. But 'Nihaka became his magical caretaker, slowly earning her journeyman’s rank as both a thief and a mage, the first to do so in a decade' seems to the first step on the road to one. Remember, people have flaws, and are not perfect.

Though, I did enjoy how you integrated elements from the Ashura story into the Princess Bride.

Good luck, you probably will not hear from me again. This was simply a review in passing~