Reviews for Konoha no Senkou Arashi
HoneyFictions chapter 8 . 7/10
You mention Hinata being able to beat sasuke and naruto.. yet she is a 17.5? SIGNIFICANTLY lower than the rest? NO hate I'm just confused
TheFoxandHerShadow chapter 14 . 5/12
I understand your sentiment around writing what you would like to read, I share in it. No matter what you choose to edit, let me share I quite enjoy this story. So whether you intend an overhaul to change anything to improve your feel of it or continue it, I enjoy this story and your writing style!
Guest chapter 14 . 3/29
Thoroughly enjoyed your writing. Best characterization of a fem Naruto I’ve seen in awhile. Not to mention the care you put into the other characters as well. Good shit
LivingRedRose chapter 14 . 3/26
Staying tuned ...
LunaLance chapter 14 . 2/5
God I hope that this drops soon!
Hopefulone8241 chapter 14 . 12/5/2022
Yay I am excited
Pinkypi chapter 14 . 11/13/2022
I'M DEFINITELY READING THIS IN 2022! OMERGAWD I HOPE THAT MEANS IT'S COMING BACK ONLINE. Was such a good read all the way through :D I can't wait for Naruto to master the Fuuton no Yoroi enough to be a living blade.
Pinkypi chapter 12 . 11/13/2022
yeah... she was pretty bad in canon pre time skip. but like her character has the excuse of I'm a throwaway character that my creator decided to keep and develop. -" The bashing stories make her even WORSE than her canon self. Which is kinda sad life yo.
Pinkypi chapter 11 . 11/13/2022
yeah I really don't blame you. Naruto spent 2 and a half years training and the only thing he pulled out really was better brawling, improved clone coordination and bigger rasengan... That's it I think. Meanwhile Sasuke improved his everything and developed the chidori even further while learning a completely new skill in kenjutsu. Granted his Sharingan let him short cut some of that and Orochimaru threw him into fight pits to get better, but Naruto was heavily jilted. The main reason he caught up so fast in the second half was because he was constantly fighting Akatsuki and other high leveled ninja while surviving and then learned Sage Mode and FINALLY an actual taijutsu style in the form of the frog katas. Though he did get his elemental recomposition training for wind done and perfected an elemental rasengan.
Pinkypi chapter 7 . 11/13/2022
Damn... He WOULD bring it up only after she left. Poor Naruto... great chapter though Kappa.
Pinkypi chapter 5 . 11/13/2022
Yeeee chapter was awesome poor Sasuke at the end though not realizing he merely shocked her to a near stone like state. Though I feel like people misunderstand the nature of elemental jutsu. I mean you got really close. Then it kind of collapsed on certain. It's not that Kakashi can't use wind. It's just so much harder than the others he doesn't see the value in the effort it'd take for him to get it to the same proficiency as them. It doesn't even take elemental recomposition in order to learn elemental jutsu. Sasuke is a good example. He didn't start with fire recomposition. He started with just learning how to do Gokakyu no jutsu. Though learning recomposition would make it easier to learn the jutsu. It's mostly needed to reduce the cost of higher level jutsu. Or in the case of Daitoppa and Gokakyu increasing their power. Hotter and faster for one. Stronger and sharper for the other. Though technically Kakashi was smart to teach her recomposition first since it's something that'd constantly aid her later on.

The reason Naruto had to push his mastery of wind so far was because he was creating a new Jutsu. Well "completing it" is what they called it. But technically he was creating a new one. One that relied purely on control with no hand signs meaning he'd need nothing less than a high level of mastery. Kishimoto seriously underused it though... Naruto would've gotten a serious boost in ability had he'd just learned some wind jutsu at that point.
Pinkypi chapter 4 . 11/13/2022
Eeeh... It's not that Hinata's bloodline was weaker than Neji's... it's just that his specialized in seeing details better. Pretty sure Hinata had a much larger range on hers in exchange. Kind of like how Itachi was like god level with genjutsu while Sasuke seemed to excel at reading people aka "seeing into the future".

Then again we didn't even know she vastly outranged Neji in distance until much later in the series (aka after you'd written this chapter). Neji capping out at 800 meters before his death. While she could already see over a kilometer away and ended up capping out at 20 kilometers.

So I guess this comment is kind of pointless xD
Pinkypi chapter 3 . 11/13/2022
nice. Ironic that in actuality this team would have 3 clan heirs on it. As Uzushio is destroyed and Naruto the only Uzumaki left in Konoha even if Kushina and Naruto didn't come from the direct line which lets face it, even without Kishimoto saying it, they probably did. That would make her the heiress by default.
Pinkypi chapter 2 . 11/13/2022
It was frigging awesome! Even better, the thought process you gave us with insight to Kakashi's thoughts about teaching Naruto ninjutsu is easily applicable to canon Naruto as well except even more so in that Naruto's case. Since this Naruto already understood she didn't have the proper coordination and only using a couple at a time at most was better even if she had a lot up. Where as canon Naruto just wasted his by throwing them headlong with no thought process. On the other hand he overlooked supplemental and defensive jutsu in that process. Head Hunter and Water wall are both ones she can learn before mastering coordination between the clones. One allowing her to defend the clones from AOE attacks a bit better and herself. While the other is a bit more simple to integrate into combinations. Neither being a risk at hurting her teammates and would actually help her learn to coordinate a bit better since she'd have to make sure too many don't defend or burrow when fighting. Hiding like a mole, projection fish and mud wall also fall into said categories. Actually. Teaching her mostly supplementary earth and defensive earth style jutsu would probably help her develop a second affinity. So instead of water wall maybe just the mud wall. This kills 3 birds with one stone kek (see what I did there) She learns some ninjutsu without being delayed, Ninjutsu that actually help her with learning to coordinating her clones, and developing a second affinity. Assuming you kept Wind as her primary.
Pinkypi chapter 1 . 11/13/2022
Actually about 1000% sure that the only nine will pass thing is part of the test itself... It'd be absolutely moronic and stupid for ONLY nine ninja to pass each year. Like stop and think about everything you knew when you started writing this. 1. a war was ended shortly before the Kyuubi's attack. 2. the Kyuubi's attack. 3. Uchiha massacre. These three simple pieces of information should tell you that Konoha's ninja population was actually hurting in recent times. To only allow nine students to become ninja would be a monumental fuck up of epic proportions. Like how would they ever get their military strength built up if they only allowed nine ninja to join them a year. That's literally only 108 ninja added to their forces over the span on Naruto's life up until the point he became a genin. That's less ninja gained than they lost in a single night during the Kyuubi attack. Less ninja gained than they lost from the massacre. Considering the size of their clan and the sheer amount of ninja they had running the police force and the ones in the regular shinobi forces. This also assuming they didn't lose a single ninja to death, betrayal, injury or old age. Outside of those factors and they still wouldn't have recovered even a small fraction of the ninja lost from war, biju and the massacre. They definitely accept more passing than just nine. Even if it's like that one story where the ones with a Jonin Sensei are actually leading the "elite" genin on a fast track and the rest are relegated to a genin corp where they are trained in mass by further instruction as a group to get them up to snuff. Where they rely on field promotions or get luckily assigned to another team. There's got to be some way they get more ninja that the ones we saw on paper. Where the rookie 9 are just the 9 rookies put in for the exams and did well making it at least to the prelims for the 3rd round.
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