That was AWESOME! _

Uberness. You see people that have naruto master the hirashin like instantly or he sucks completely at it, your concept is facsinating. I would love to see a continuation of this, or just the concept of using the hiraishin to send attacks to the enemy in another story. Great job.

Great story, though I kinda wish it wasn't a oneshot. I really enjoy reading stories where Naruto has the humility to take a serious look at his own flaws, and yours was much more original that the standard seek out ten senseis, wear ridiculous amounts of weights, etc. I also like how you described Naruto's training trip, it gives a fair explanation of why Naruto seems to have not improved as much as he should have.