|Reviews for Mistakes|
| Rebel-Angel-Hero chapter 1 . 12/27/2009
yay for jamesXlily fluff! this is good, very good!
| Demented Vampiric Zombie chapter 1 . 7/1/2008
| CasablancaInTheTardis chapter 1 . 6/11/2008
that was so cute!
i loved it!
well written - great work!
| xxpiratexx chapter 1 . 6/11/2008
This would be /much/ better if you had a beta, so I strongly encourage you to get one.
However, you do have some raw talent, so, in essence, congratulations! This theme is rather cliche, though, and many authors use it, but for a first fic, you probably haven't explored the site much, so this...this is wonderful. Just get ahold of a beta.
| idkmybffspike chapter 1 . 6/10/2008
HAHAHA! That was great! I absolutely loved it!
| flowerypetal chapter 1 . 6/9/2008
good story. it was funny and cute!
| snitch-bewitch chapter 1 . 6/9/2008
AWESOME! Soo funy XD
| Blackheart09 chapter 1 . 6/9/2008
not a bad fic, for your first one anyways.. if you need a beta, well... if you want, i could do the job for you. I'm currently working on a fic of my own right now too, but if you want help, i'll offer mine, if you want to contact me then here's my email
well, nice fic :) hope more are on the way, you should post them anyways despite any amount of reviews, and just post them up. You'll never know what the reaction will be till you post, so good luck
| padfootloose chapter 1 . 6/9/2008
It was pretty good. A bit confusing. There were no commas after somebody said something.
"Last night and just now" Lily replied should look like "Last night and just now," Lily replied.
A lot of your sentences didn't have periods at the end.
Also, James was a Chaser, not a Seeker.
Other than that, it was good.
| thecolouryes chapter 1 . 6/8/2008
OMG OMG OMG it was absolutely HLARIOUS! oops, I spelled that wrong! Well, I'm too lazy to fix it, so i hope you know what it means! Or can guess or something!
This is my favorite part of a line: ... causing all the people in the hall to cheer, including to Sirius and Remus’ surprise, Dumbledore and McGonagall
Heh, lol HIRALIOUS! I didn't spell it right that time, either! Woot! I'm really hyper now! Good bye!
| Hannahble chapter 1 . 6/8/2008
i loved it, it was very awesome, and i do say funny. good work!