Reviews for Prom Please?
Jmc chapter 1 . 1/17/2012
Joey Carsella ? Nita ? What prom when ?
UnderxGravity chapter 1 . 6/3/2011
Just confused me a bit with the transition straight into the dance. I was like HOLY MOLEY, how did they get there? But you kept them in character, and chaste, ha. Lovely, beautifully written.
active-imagination-rocks chapter 1 . 6/3/2010
Cute! Very nice idea and Nita would totally flip all those girls off! XD It looks a little disconnected though since every one or two sentences you started a new paragraph. Ither then that it was a very cute one-shot.
QuixoticQuest chapter 1 . 12/4/2009
I love the title.

Well, let me tackle the constructive crit first before I go on a rant about how much I love this fic. )

Ahem, firstly, you have some minor grammatical and mechanical problems (nothing huge) but I'll point them out for the sake of helping you out so you don't have to go find them:

1. "That one(,) Nita, let(')s sit at that one!"

2. (She) and a group of mutual friends...

That's all the ones I could spot on a first read.

Now for the good stuff:

Ha, ha. Chicken salad, that was priceless. I loved it. "Prom, you know, the dancy thing," I liked that line and the one about the chick flicks. What horrors happened with the chick flicks (and ice-cream- not something I'd do personally, maybe just the ice cream but I'm with Kit on the chick flicks thing).

Her stomach didn't care. Stomachs usually don't, you did a great job pacing this one-shot and not going OOC.

I LOVED this fic. Write more YW, please!

Best,

-Don "QuixoticQuest" )
SnowsongIsAJaypawFan chapter 1 . 8/24/2009
Chicken salad sandwich without the chicken and with some fruit and without the bread and with a plate and fork is good. I don't know about Chicken salad sandwich without chicken and with apple.
Gracie chapter 1 . 8/11/2009
Great job! I LOVE all of your YW stories (believe me, I've read nearly all of them). Keep up the good work! I hope you write more!
zebrasdancing chapter 1 . 7/4/2009
nice
robotamputee chapter 1 . 1/20/2009
Remember me? Just reviewed your story Partners. Well, I'm back for more (like, five seconds later) and this one proves just as good as the one before. The style, all choppy and comic, is good, though there's definitely a balance between one sentence paragraphs and more traditional ones. Both characters do seem a little OOC, but hey, it's a fanfic, what do you expect? Found the fact that you called this kiss as well as the one in Partners a 'Kit kind of kiss' kind of cute. Is that trademarked? I might like to use it. Anyway, keep up the good work, can't wait till A Wizard of Mars comes out (whenever that'll be) to see what really happens. Thanks,

~Droplets
XXxlovebreaksthebrokenxXX chapter 1 . 7/31/2008
AH! I was in a really bad mood, but this story totally cheered me up! :) Thanks for writing something that isn't over-fluffy but still has that happy-sweetness!
browneyednerd chapter 1 . 7/28/2008
Me likey this story
Shima And Tempis chapter 1 . 7/7/2008
Normally I don't really like prom-ish fics (could be due to the fact that I didn't go to mine) but I really love the way you wrote this. Very in character, and something about your narration really getting inside Nita's head rang true with me. Well done!

-SAT
Sofie Cee chapter 1 . 7/5/2008
That was cute, I liked it.
threeaquila chapter 1 . 6/30/2008
sweet fic
gracefullyme1025 chapter 1 . 6/28/2008
aw that was really cute. I like this little prom thing. It sort of reminded me of my prom. :) keep writing.
Unhappy Squirrel chapter 1 . 6/19/2008
Hola, my official vegetarian buddy, guess what we're having for dinner? Yep, chicken salad and it would have been with bread but I was too lazy to make it. (Actually we didn't have all the ingredients, serious. I was going to make it in the bread machine. I can handle the bread machine. Besides the oven is dying.)

I liked that. It was cute and funny. It was good. Purple-spotted elephant good. And I really liked the part about the chick flick movies.
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