I love the way you described the friendship between Mac and Flack and at the same time, it is so sad to see Mac feel helpless and Flack trying to realize what is the best thing to say or do so. I was so impressed with the word 'battle-shocked eyes" you used in here.

The scene between Rich and Jake is so intense that I felt shivers running through my body. I can't help but feel sorry for Jake because he at least tried to do the right thing even though it was too late and what he did earlier was far from good. I think that Rich will be more dangerous after he had Jake whom Rich considered a burden for him killed.

OMG! I hope Stella will be able to get out of the car on her own or at least someone will find her soon.

This is another fantastic chapter! You keep up tension and it nearly stopped my heart! :D Ah...poor Lindsay! I had imagined this would come. I mean, she would feel guilty about not identifying the car and let it escape out of her sight. You captured all her emotions, including anger at herself about she letting these perps have Stella and desperate fear that something bad had happened to Danny -elaborately and so perfectly. It's no wonder that she has lost her cool. Is it weird that I'm glad to see her losing her cool head a little bit? :D Lindsay in action is one of my favorites. LOL!

As for Rich and Jake, this chapter just increased my feelings of hate toward Rich. He is such a cold, cruel and heartless person.

My absolute favorite line here is this: Mac moved aside as they knelt beside Danny and set to work, helping him, he knew; but all he could see was a man who trusted his life with him, losing that life underneath their hands and equipment. It wasn't Danny lying there. It wasn't Danny with spread-eagled arms and legs, broken body, and skin whiter than the boiled away sky. It was the action of two men he would not allow himself to think of as human. They had taken from him Danny's impetuous bravery, and they had taken Stella's vibrant presence.
That they might have taken her life, he could not, and would not let his mind anywhere near to thinking.

I can feel Mac's anger and also see Angell managing to keep cool. You've kept me awake even though it's time I should go to sleep :D

I have to say I'm so glad that you finally had Lindsay make an appearance here! :D I was waiting eagerly for her to show up :D I like every single detail you put in here, it was very realistic. I'm wondering if that car is the same car that had Stella. If so, I'm sure Lindsay and Markham are going to feel guilty for choosing not to identify it when they find out what happened to Danny and Stella. As for Mrs. Adams, you have created such a sweet and realistic character! :) I love her asking Lindsay about whether or not she has a young man as well as asking Markham the same question. And her words about the letters, "more important than you can imagine. There are lives inside those words and papers; and deaths if they‘re not found.” was very touching. Can't wait to read more :)

Wow! Your description about how Mac was really pissed off when he found out what had happened to Stella was brilliant! I can feel his anger clearly through your fantastic way of writing. I'm really worried about if you had Stella killed. If so, I can't imagine what Mac would do...possibly he would go over the edge and lose his temper. I liked the speed of the story going on and the heated discussion between Jake and Rich. The difference of these two criminals' personalities are very interesting to read. You made each of them stand out in character. I'm definitely looking forward to the next chapter :)

It started off slow and then by the end of this chapter it picked up speed and BOOM! (Haha!) OMG! I hope Danny and Stella are all right. As well as the first chapter, the description of the heat is brilliant, not to mention the body sliding into the water. I'm wondering if Mrs. Adams will take an important part in this story.

I love Stella laughing at Mac about always wearing black shirts and his response to her. "I hate buying shirts." - Certainly, I can't picture Mac shopping. Haha!

As always, You are so good at describing a scene, people and the weather that I was immediately drawn into the world of this story.

Danny, you'll never win against the tag team of Stella and Angell! Haha! I loved the banter between these three. :D
Danny telling Angell she has been spending too much time with Flack was so funny :D And her response to Danny, "My humor is my own, Messer" is brilliant! I think you captured her perfectly.

I'm very intrigued by the mystery in here. And I love the descriptions of the heat, even though it made me feel hotter and hotter. Haha! I'm definitely looking forward to reading more :)

Well, I swore I'd get round to reading this and I finally am. I'm rather entranced already, the level of detail into the description without overdoing it is really well done as is the balance of personal and casework. I'm looking forward to continuing on.

Izzi x

I made it! Thanks to my dad talking a walk with the baby.

I really, really like it. I wish i had taken the time to read it all sooner though. But now that i have read it, I'm sure I'm going to read it again at some point :)

So I've gotten this far, but I don't think I'll get much further tonight though.

I just wanted to add that the fire-scene was much more intense and gripping than I remembered it, I seriously don't know where you get it.

Lou :)

So, I gave myself a royal kick and decided to start reading this while I'm waiting for BallettMaus' opinion on my latest addition to my own story.

I haven't gotten further than this though, but having finally taken the time to read it thoroughly, I found out I love it.

I really like the descriptions of the scenery especially, they are amazingly well done.

Also the scene between the two bad guys, it just works somehow.

I'm off to work a bit more on my own story, before I get back to reading this. But I'm very curious to get on with reading it though. :)

Lou :D

Wow! I know I'm late by almost three years, but this story is so good I had to let you know!

I liked the way you wrapped up the ending. That was a long story and obviously took a lot of work to write. I'm glad you got so many reviews and am pleased to add mine.

Kinda expected Stella to have taken Zee a gift of some kind.

Gotta admit I as very happy it was Angell who took down that guy Rich.

Very good with the girl Janie squeezing thru the window as TJ came thru the door. I found myself holding my breath then.

I realize you wrote this story a long time ago, but I'm just now reading it. It's very good so far and I'm enjoying it.

Sorry, Im soo late for this party...

I read this story in one go- and let me tell ya: WOW! Amazing! Great writing, characterization and entertainment.

I know that I dont do it justice with this mini-review but I wanted to tell you that I love it! :)