|Reviews for Rokudaime Pain for Team Shinu|
| Guest chapter 4 . 6/25/2016
Not a fan
| Othinus chapter 2 . 5/4/2013
I'm already guessing this is a NaruxIno fic? If so I'm dropping it. Ino is someone I am not fond of at all.
| kaori and yoshi chapter 16 . 8/29/2010
sakura is abitch she doesnt even care about konoha! she practically killed tsunade! i love your story i want to read how ino kicks sakura's ass! i cant wait for the next chapter!
| Animefanatic-4ever chapter 16 . 7/22/2010
Wow! Lûv it!
Cant wait for more
| Savannah's Angels chapter 16 . 6/19/2010
Love the plot of the story, can't wait to see how the invasion goes.
| twilightserius chapter 16 . 6/11/2010
OFF THE BITCH
| naruto no juubi chapter 16 . 6/9/2010
| Lousy Poet Automaton chapter 5 . 6/9/2010
Your style is a bit raw, but that's not the main problem. The main thing is that there are parts that feel very rushed, to the point where there's a disconnect from the characters and what's going on.
Among other things, the triggering event for Naruto's departure seems awfully shallow. And your Sakura is still acting like a caricature of the brat before the timeskip, not the teenager in shipuuden who is willing to kill Sasuke so that Naruto doesn't have to. Yeah, OK, it's your fic, but if you're going to be so lazy with the scenes leading up to Naruto taking off, you might as well have skipped those scenes entirely and started with him on the road.
Also, the choice of his team-mates seems pretty arbitrary.
I truly don't get the people that leave reviews that say this is the best fic they've read in a long time. It's not awful, but it really needs a lot more work. Don't listen to those kiss-asses with ADD - you're not going to improve if you believe those people.
You need to work on your timing for when to blaze through plot-driven points and when to take a step back and pause. A good scene can have no dialogue. A good scene can have no action. Scenes that are all dialogue or all action are rarely good.
| naruto no juubi chapter 15 . 4/5/2010
well this is one hell of a fic this one is the best fic i read in a long time so i hope that you continue this fic i really hope you do
| Kole-chan chapter 15 . 12/21/2009
hey! great story! i can't wait to read more. well rounded maybe make the chaps a bit longer but other than that really impressive
| TheLastKorosu chapter 15 . 8/26/2009
very nice story. I liked the idea of Sasuke getting so caught up he forgot to check Itachi's pulse. gets me laughing everytime i read it.
Wondering, though, how Shikamaru is going to frame Sakura for Tsunade's murder, and then who the next Hokage will be?
Also, what will then happen to the rest of the Akatsuki?
either way, i'm sure it will be a great read.
| tedlay chapter 15 . 8/13/2009
please udapte asap it would be an honor to keep on reading
| A Forgotten Fairy. .AKA- Fairy chapter 15 . 6/29/2009
oh goodness... i wonder how they're going to react to Ino controlling water... that'll be hilarious! haha! i love that Suigetsu said that, that was pretty funny! awesome story, and i cant wait to see more... and to see Sakura go down! WOOT! go Shikamaru! :D hehe! oh and if the poll is still up, im too lazy to go to ur profile, so is it NaruIno? please tell me it is... ive been overly obsessed with this couple lately... hehe? anyways, please update!
| Dudtheman chapter 8 . 5/24/2009
okay i love the idea of your story but major things keep happening that seem to be out of thin air. naruto leaves village to save it okay thats naruto. then joins forces with sasuke WTH? i also feel dumb cause i read the first chatper(and Rokudaime is) twice over and never once did i see a point where sasuke tells naruto he is going to take over or destroy the village which is the whole reason he left. if ive just missed somthing please point out.
| Dudtheman chapter 6 . 5/24/2009