Reviews for Death's Pride |
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![]() ![]() ![]() Una lastima que aquí quedo... fue bueno mientras dura. Que en paz descanse autor :( |
![]() ![]() ![]() I do wish this had continued |
![]() ![]() ![]() Yeah, let the wonderful fair ministry know you are afflicted, and where you hide out, and live, and your family. It's not like they would send out hunter/killer teams, is it. What does Malfoy surrender at the desk. He always has his cane, and he is not an employee. Oh, wait. He just flues into the ministers office to go around security. |
![]() ![]() ![]() this fic's so tiring to read barely anything happens, it's padded by random infodumps and needlessly long and unrealistic character interactions. dropped |
![]() ![]() ![]() stop with the info dumps progress the fucking story |
![]() ![]() ![]() your dates are off it goes from friday the 17th to saturday the 18th and then sunday the 18th i didn't check if someone else had pointed it out this is my first read through and i thought i would try to be helpful |
![]() ![]() ![]() Where is Neville in this? Great story but missing Neville |
![]() ![]() Literally jack shit. You utterly failed at the point of the prompt. 630,000 words of absolutely nothing important. There’s little bits that are interesting, but those parts are overshadowed by the fact that you made Harry a fucking retard. He’s so busy playing house that in over half a million words and nearly 30 chapters that he hasn’t done shit. |
![]() ![]() I’m sorry but is it your goal to make this Harry as fucking retarded as possible? He’s just now making a list of the crap he needs to do? He knows literally everything that’s going to happen, that’s the whole fucking premise of this writing prompt. Yet some how you’ve managed to make it so that he’s blundering around like a complete idiot. |
![]() ![]() ![]() that pizza sounds fucking delicious. love pinapple and sausage on pizza. never had them together on one pizza but i want it |
![]() ![]() Lots of people bitching and whining on here about how the story is abandoned and how there is no update, and others trashing the writer... yeah, he died... so, yeah of course there aren't going to be updates, and the only thing he abandoned was the mortal coil, and at a very young age too. So, not cool. Stop attacking and trashing a dead guy. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Well, I gave it this a shot and finally in this chapter he gets angry at her for being naive and bossy. But still, it doesn't fix all the previous offences of author literally bending backwards trying to justify Hermione acting the way she 'always' ( canon-ish) does - demanding knowledge, nagging, being bossy, controlling and mostly naive. I'll continue just to see Snape get his due at the very least, but as is the case with many H/Hr stories, some things can be difficult to swallow. To be positive with some things, the writing is very good, the premise itself is interesting and pacing is mostly consistent. :) |
![]() ![]() Ngl, Harry’s thing about making Snape suffer is really stupid on his part. That’s how you get recurring villains. I kinda hope that isn’t why you did it. It seems so avoidable. Better to just slit his throat and vanish the body. |
![]() ![]() ![]() this whole book crap is annoying, she shouldn't be allowed to read it and Harry should be more careful on what knowledge he lets people read |
![]() ![]() ![]() Unfortunately this story is unfinished and probably abandoned, however, this IS a very good story for it's unfinished state... This story IS very good, as I said, so I will be following and favoriting this story just in case it's ever continued, and I would also like to say thank you to the author for writing the story and that I wish the author luck in their future writing endeavors, as they ARE pretty good writers notwithstanding the long, almost run-on, chapters, that I honestly feel could have been shorter. I will also say though, that it shouldn't have been as big a deal as the author claims reviewers are making it out to be. I mean, longer chapters, whoop-de-dingdong; seriously, that's not THAT much of a detractor from the story and shouldn't be treated as such in my opinion... |