|Reviews for Without Sin|
| ccase13 chapter 5 . 10/7/2011
This is an excellent adventure. Dean Winchester being without sin would be interesting. I like how you fixed it that he didn't have to keep it after he healed Sammy.
| flamanipulator chapter 5 . 5/9/2009
wow, this is also a really good story. I like the whole concept of Dean being perfect, and that it helps him show a bit more emotion/humanness. It's really cool how you can bring that stuff out through words.
| bhoney chapter 5 . 3/30/2009
UGH! I just spent like 30 minutes doing a super-long review for this chapter, and ffnet ATE it. I'm so grouchy! And I'm too tired to try and re-create it all, sorry. So I'll just do a quick summary.
*Dean being afraid of needles-really endearing
*Awesome weapons ideas, especially the buckshot
*Sam not drinking beer cuz Dean couldn't have any-sweet.
*Dean's idea for water guns with pee in them. LOL I have a fic idea jotted down where they use water guns with holy water in them. Less ick than pee, but hopefully as effective. LOL
*Dean figuring out a way to take out the army of kids without hurting them and ESPECIALLY the image of him healing them with the holy water after the fight.
*Dean healing Sam with his tears
*Really creative and disturbing description of Lilith's true form
*Drill-sergeant Bobby yelling some sense into Dean when he's about to go off on the suicidal plan to go find Sam
*LOVED the use of "Funky Town"
“Dude!” Sam yelped, “ I’m not drawin’ you a hot bath so you can soak your junk in the Holy water” LOL
“Like those giant tumors they take outta people in Ripley’s? You know half their body weight suddenly gone?” lol
Sad that though Sam's change was brought on by a desire to protect Dean from pain and anger at Lilith for causing it, once he'd turned he only felt shame and disdain for his brother. I feel like we're seeing this on the show now-he's boosting his powers to protect Dean (I think), but seems to feel only disdain for Dean's "weakness" and "holding him back".
Wasn't sure why Dean killing someone in self-defense would've been sin, but glad he got released from his service. Would've liked to see more wrap-up at the end where the boys can really enjoy being together with both of them alive, now that the big battle's over and Dean's not holy anymore. See where they go from here.
Really original and interesting premise, suspenseful, great characterization, nice brotherly moments, very well-written. I'm favoriting it!
| bhoney chapter 4 . 3/5/2009
LOL So I'm hoping the lust Dean's currently experiencing over the serving girls isn't enough to rob him of his holy state. LOL
Loved that he was able to help with healing those affected by the tornado, or at least minimize their wounds. And I just loved Bobby in this. Glad he's on-board with the plan. Even though I'm not sure I like the plan, what with Sam turning. But still.
Interesting idea, that Ava might've killed her fiance once she turned. I wouldn't have thought she'd have turned that quickly, I figured it was sometime while being held prisoner and forced to fight for her life. But...it is an interesting theory. I'll have to ponder it some more.
| bhoney chapter 3 . 3/1/2009
I LOVE a protective Sam: "Bobby watched Sam’s profile and he saw fierce determination hardened Sam’s features as he stared at the road ahead. 'And she won’t ever get her hands on him again.' growled the younger man gripping the wheel tighter."
The Sam in Dean's dream was just chilling. And this image was heartbreaking: "He fought the urge to reach his arms out to his damaged brother and hug him to his chest, to rock him back and forth like he’d had when they were children and Sammy had been scared." I really, really hate the idea of Sam going darkside. I hope that doesn't happen here.
This cracked me up, because it is the quintessential brotherly thing to do: "Sam breathily replied 'OH, VHHery Nhice' right in Dean’s face as his older brother rose up to lean on him for the walk to the house." *snort*
I was a little confused when you said that the boys had played at the abandoned warehouse in Lawrence when they were kids. I thought that John left Lawrence with them shortly after their mom died and their first time back there was in "Home".
I was really glad that Dean opened up to Sam about his dream, at least they're not keeping secrets. It is odd that Sam's eyes were blue...we haven't seen that before. Hmm...but I'm still really hoping you don't go down the "Sam goes darkside" path.
Okay this: "You’d have only minor responsibilities as outlined by the Church such as a monthly Blood offering, that is merely ceremonial, and would provide consecrated amulets for the faithful and of course the production of Holy Water that would be disbursed throughout the Dioceses of the world and offered to the pilgrims that visit the Holy city.” is super disturbing to me. Especially the blood offering part. Ick. I think the Vatican really screwed up on this one. Especially this: “Regrettably, this offer only extends to Dean no other family members would be allowed permanent stay-for security reasons.” I mean, did they REALLY think he was gonna go for that? He's not getting much out of the deal, for giving up his entire life, not to mention his family.
I personally don't think that Lilith still holds the contract to Dean's soul. I think once he got out of Hell the contract was broken. I also don't think that Sam having demon blood necessary means he'll go to Hell. Though if he keeps using his powers...well, that's probably bad. But I had to love that Sam is willing to do whatever it takes to keep his brother from Lilith's hands, and Dean's desperation to save Sam from experiencing what he did in Hell. It was an interesting plan Sam came up with. The ending to this chapter was so bittersweet. Great last line.
| bhoney chapter 2 . 2/28/2009
This made me laugh: “I’ll take his ass ‘cause I’ve tenderized it enough over the years with my boot”. LOL Sounds like Bobby! *snort*
And this was SO sweet. Such a lovely picture of devotion: "Sam had lovingly polished the car every week while his brother’s been ‘away’ so when Dean had run his hand over the shiny black paint job, and said, 'She looks good Sammy'. That one comment meant the world to him. Hav’n his brother back, hav’n his praise at keep’n his baby ready for him. It almost cost Sam a sob, but he’d turned away and swallowed just in time. No chick flick moments here! No sir. Not gonna happen." Aw...*sniffle*
Really interesting fight with the demon outside. I kinda expected Dean's touch to have some effect on him, like burn him or something. Didn't expect it would be his blood. Very intriguing...though not terribly convenient, as he can't just go bleeding all over everyone.
The bit about the priest sending the shirt to the special lab seems vaguely ominous to me...
Still really enjoying this!
| bhoney chapter 1 . 2/27/2009
Aw...so sweet: "And then he felt the soft caress of hair across his cheek and the pressure of lips on his forehead, lips moistened with tears and he knew. He knew that scent it smelled like home and he knew that voice." *sniffle*
Great bit of insight into Dean's character: "Dean never ceased to amaze him by summing up the impossible with a Pop culture reference." LOL Too true! I didn't know that about Walt Disney.
Oh, Dean. He just doesn't get how much he means to people: "Dean was blown away by how many people had been in on this, strangers willing to loose their licenses, their jobs on the wild chance that he might, MIGHT, be brought back."
LOVED this: “Boy, doncha know you’re like a son to me? I barely had all I could do to keep it together and to keep your brother together so we could git this done...And if you EVER do a fool headed thing like this again I swear I’ll kick your ass all the way to purgatory myself, do I make my self clear… ya idjit?" I love Bobby. Great characterization there, I could hear him saying this.
The brotherly banter made me giggle: “You’re not fixin to give me a kiss again are you?” Sam pulled his hand away, “Shut up…jerk.” “Hey, at least you could buy me dinner first” Dean teased.
LOL I've been missing their banter on the show.
Great line: "I mean look at me I look like a freakin’ 'Light Brite' peg for God’s sake.” Ah, Light Brite. Haven't thought of that for ages! LOL
This cracked me up: “Better wake Bobby and let him see this maybe he’s read something about…some phenomena that causes people to become human glow sticks.” Loved all Dean's snarking about his "complication". LOL So in character, and pretty darn funny, too. *snickers* Especially this: “Right not like: ‘died’, in Hell for seven months, and been raised from the dead normal.” *snort*
Really interesting premise. I'm loving the glowing, the healing touch (both on himself and others), the test they did with the water and the sulfur. Just really original and fascinating.
And I loved this image: "Each step the shorter one took a lesson in concentration and each step the taller one took a testimony to the patience and love he had for the man that leaned on him."
You did a great job on Missouri too. You got her voice just right: “Now, child I know this is all hard for you to take in. You need time to let your body heal, to get used to be’ in back in this world. But I know how strong you are, and I know the Good Lord wouldn’t trust this to anyone He didn’t already know could handle it. You keep your faith. You keep the love you have in your heart strong, it’s what seen you this far an’ I ‘suspect it’s gonna carry you through.” I really liked her parting words to Dean.
But man-I don't envy Dean AT ALL. "One misstep, one fall- if you let sin into your life again in any form your state of grace will be over and the powerful weapon against evil you’ve been given for the war we are all fighting will be lost." Yeah, no pressure there. And we all know humans do so well with the whole "being sinless" thing. Not.
This made me giggle too: “Dude, some of them were probably nice girls before they met you.” LOL
Poor Dean. The last line really fits how he'd likely feel about having to live like this.
Again-really interesting idea. Can't wait to see what you do with it!
| Dianne chapter 5 . 12/1/2008
This was a wonderful idea, so full of joy and sorrow and a happy ending to boot. I loved the idea of Dean's grace and how he accepted it, weary but willing. All of your characters were perfect too. Thanks for sharing.
| Orange Autumn chapter 5 . 10/5/2008
Okay, first off, loved the junk in the holy water comment. Cracked me up. And I cracked up over the spurts of demon death line, too. xD And the best thing! Sam with the evil urge for a cigar! Hehehe! Also loved Dean's career change snark.
Secondly, holy crap! When Bobby lasso'd Dean, I immediately thought of Wonder Woman, which made me think of Bobby in the designated outfit. Brought tears to my eyes. Lol, me and my crazy imagination.
And I loved that you used a sentimental item to pull this all together when it came to saving Sam. Very moving moment, too, when Dean thought Sam was dead. Very, very sweet that his tears revived him! :D
Very awesome story. Suspenseful and action-y! Good job tying everything together, and I look forward to seeing more stuff from you!
| janet1982 chapter 5 . 10/3/2008
graet story, will there be a sequel?
| SuperFan3 chapter 5 . 10/2/2008
Very nice ending to this fic. It was amazing the way things came together. From the possessed priest to the situation with Lillith. Sam going dark side for a short time and Dean saving him again. Wow what a story, I hope you have lots more dreams because this one really worked out well. Thanks for sharing.
| Phanie28 chapter 5 . 10/1/2008
OMG, that was one of the best stories I've ever had the pleasure to read! This last chapter was wonderful in so many ways. This final battle was breathtaking and kept me on the edge of my seat the whole time. Your writing and descriptions of everything that was happening were perfect! I wish I could write like that.
Thank you for having such and interesting dream and being able to bring it to life so beautifully by writing it and sharing it with us!
| suzijacuzi chapter 5 . 9/29/2008
I have ambivalent feelings about this story. Don't get me wrong I enjoyed the suspense and angst (That just doesn't sound right does it?), but I am always at a loss when Catholic trappings are involved. Keep up the writing though, perhaps it may bring me some understanding.
| Mangacat201 chapter 5 . 9/29/2008
Holy crap indeed.. well, that went with a bang if I might say so! I can't say I'm not satisfied with the end, it ties all ends! And Dean gets to be himself again (with all the neat little extras like hunting and drinking and... big bang *g*) couldn't be happier for him! *the bitch is dead, the bitch is dead* singsongs
| darksupernatural chapter 5 . 9/29/2008
This was a very awesome story. Love the original concept that time in hell could burn away sin and not cause it to develop. My fave part was where Dean saved Sam of course. Great job and if this came from a dream, then Keep Dreaming. Some of our best work comes from the recesses of our minds when we have no control of them.