|Reviews for The Keeper|
| Nicholai8059Lover chapter 1 . 12/26/2013
This fic felt kinda weird than other ones I've read, but anyway loved it! though your English was pretty difficult for me -.-!
| incurableinsanity chapter 1 . 7/27/2013
Beautiful work. I love the characterization and the way everything flows. :)
| Lordess Meep chapter 1 . 7/13/2012
It's been close to two weeks since I first read your story and since its taken me SO DAMNED LONG to find words to justify the sheer awesomeness that is rampant in your story - and trust me, I have completely failed at that - I have decided to post a review anyway.
I can't describe it as anything other than pure genius.
First off, I love your writing style - it's articulate and witty, not to mention the way you add these little details, be it about Italy in general or the anecdotes on Buffon. These add so many layers to the story you're telling that I am quite literally ashamed for daring to call myself a writer.
(Case in point, this review)
Speaking of witty, I burst out in actual laughter at many points but I died at this:
"Gokudera has the sudden, inexplicable urge to send his former tutor a postcard. In Milan. Lovely weather. Do not wish you were here."
So simple, but such a hilarious observation, I still can't keep the chuckles at bay.
Not to mention, this:
"Do you prefer the one that will make you look like a child gigolo, or the one that will make you look like an over-the-hill leather freak?" she asks, imperious and utterly without sarcasm."
All I ask you is - why are you so awesome?
First off, Yamamoto. His description and his behaviour is so spot-on, I wouldn't have believed it was your first attempt at writing something for KHR.
But, obviously, the star of this piece is Gokudera.
Your characterizations of both 80 and 59 is nothing short of perfect. This story happens to be the primary reason why I fell in love with Gokudera - you portray him so well, better than Amano-sensei even. He's smart, a touch unhinged (hotwiring a Ducati - seriously?) and the little stories of his journey from the streets of Italy to Namimori just add so much to his character.
I feel pretty stupid now because I never quite thought about adding fashion-savvy to 59's list of traits.
And the angst that doesn't make me roll my eyes, oh the angst! I can literally feel the tension between the two radiating off of my computer screen (again, because I've re-read it so many times :D )!
I have so much more to say, so much more to gush about, only I happen to be tripping all over myself. So here's me hoping that this little bit of fangirlism tells you just how much I loved it.
Also, you happen to be one of the reasons I have begun shipping 8059 rather overenthusiastically since it is one of the only two yaoi pairings that I ship.
I can't help but feel that this praise wasn't enough.
But anyway, thank you for sharing this!
- Lordess Meep
| Halloween567 chapter 1 . 9/12/2011
I love you so much for this. It was simply amazing- the way you wrote, described everything, the characterization (8059!). If I could give constructive criticism I would, but I'm too busy trying to calm myself.
SO. AWESOME. Gokudera's "slut look" made me all giddy inside and the scenes.
| Readers-Section chapter 1 . 5/21/2011
This is just...wow. I'm kinda speechless. Your writing is...it's so good. Like so good, I dint even know how to explain. The football snippets, the cultural references, the intricate detail to the surroundings...the mathematical strain running through the story, the way these two were characterised...I'm just blown away by it all. This was fantastic.
| Powerhouse chapter 1 . 4/30/2011
ahh, the way you describe things is beautiful...
| mnemonica chapter 1 . 1/1/2011
Holy hell, this is fucking beautiful. It's like word porn, seriously, even before you threw in the mindblowing sex. I swear to god I was mindgasming. That description of Yamamoto in the Armani suit, in particular, and the football field. And Gokudera's mother. This stuff is gorgeous. Thank you so much. *u*
| Paradoxismminant chapter 1 . 7/16/2010
I liked that.
It made me smile...although I was slightly confused about the soccer player bits, but it was pretty fly (:
| comecomeparadise-fr chapter 1 . 6/20/2010
Beautiful. I'm not going to get into the way you write or all the brilliant ideas woven into this story because it would take ages to praise and I feel like I'm too much of an amateur to do this. Let me just say I loved your take on the Goku/Yama relationship and made it as close to canon as yaoi can possibly get. They're not in it just for the sex [anyway, "just for the sex" is more often than not denial that there's something deeper and they're not that deep]; they know there are things they owe each other and things the other has the right not to forgive because "they're in this together". They're not crazy in love with each other either because there are other more reliable feelings on the surface like friendship or trust. Just how Yama/Goku ought to be, really :)
No, but what I really want to delve into is your wonderful use of cultural references that give oh-so-much value to the fic. Okay, a couple few were incorrect [the correct expression is "joie de vivre", not "joie de vie" and the characteristic of a logarithm is that it grows less as values increase - applied to loneliness, that would mean its effects are less sharp as distance increases ;)]. Still, on the whole, I'm amazed that you know so much; while reading this fic there were at least ten different occasions where I had to Wiki some of the things you wrote. And learned a lot
The footballistic references were especially enjoyable, down to the smallest details. "On the smudged screen, some foreign player wearing black and red stripes was giving an interview"... Ah, memories resurface of me and my brothers cheering Lyon against those evil black and red stripes during the quarter-finals of the UEFA Champion League some years ago. You're right, a lot of European countries revolve around football and Italy is part of those. Gokudera keeping an old AC Milan jersey sounds so just.
I also appreciated your romanced take on Buffon's decision to remain with Juve after Calciopoli. Being French, I actually hate the guy and his team-mates' guts ever since the summer months of 2006 but I guess I'm not being fair. Here, you actually made me like him more, an incredible feat.
And Milan! I'm definitely not the right person to say this since I've never been to Milan myself, but from what I've heard of it and what I've seen of the rest of Italy, your depiction sounds extremely accurate. Well, it's exactly how I imagine it to be, that is. Busy, busy Milan, the pride of Italy. Tourists, traffic, excess, obsequious couture stores. Not as much history as Florence or Parma, not as much soul as Sicilia and the Southernmost cities Gokudera must have known a while back. And ah, the pigeons. Pigeons are indeed in every European city, from Prague to Paris, gathering in flocks in front of historical monuments and parks because that's where tourists are. It says on your profile page you're American, but you've definitely been to Europe, haven't you?
In any case, the way you mention Gokudera's relationship to Milan and to the rest of Italy was part of what made this fic brilliant. Especially his goodbyes: "Flying over the Pacific Ocean for the first time, he asked for his dinner in Japanese." Wow. And I'm not even mentioning Yamamoto's dilemma here, or the excellent Yama/Goku interaction.
I'm sorry, this was supposed to be a review and I ended up ranting, so you can ignore it if it bores you Just wanted to let you know that this one-shot was indeed a gem. I'm interested in Japan because I read manga, but it's nice to be reminded of somewhere close to home from time to time. Thank you for this :)
| yume76 chapter 1 . 6/5/2010
this is amazingly beautiful.
| Yarouka chapter 1 . 5/16/2010
This was fantastic. I'm so glad I finally got into Katekyo, and was able to read this amazing fic. Your writing was really something! I very much enjoyed it. I've shipped Yamamoto/Gokudera since like episode 10 or something, and you captured them so well! I'm not surprised, of course, after reading My Girlfriend, I've already dubbed you as one of the top 5 authors on ffnet, IMO. XD
Great job! Your style in this piece was to die for.
| something'sgoingtofalllikerain chapter 1 . 4/6/2010
Loved this as well as all your other 8059 fic. This one was especially breath-taking. Love the geography, the soccer references even the math and the science of it all. I worship your awesomeness, man!
| Gingerbread Owl chapter 1 . 11/16/2009
Everything about this fic is perfect, especially the amazing characterisation.
| anon azure chapter 1 . 11/1/2009
WOAH... THAT WAS AWESOME!
| Keeto chapter 1 . 10/28/2009
LOVE. This fic is so awesome, there was so much imagery and you managed to pile a load of techniques into each sentence (metahpors, similes, personification...my you'll make an english teacher very happy). Oh and all the maths and science references made the nerd inside me squeal C;
I really loved the way you described everything."There is something inherently cloying in the wind that wafts through this city in April, flirting with skirt hems..." ;U: this was a really, really engaging and brilliant fic (haven't seen anyone put so much effort into writing something in a while). Absolutely adore you for writing it, thankyou very much C:.