Reviews for The Sin Cards
Toolazytologin chapter 4 . 12/16/2012
Good story.

It has a good plot so far, but to me it doesn't necessarily flow in the right way. For example, I didn't sense the sexual tension between Sakura and Syaoran all night. You just dove right in the: "next thing you knew they were kissing passionately". Though, maybe it's just me?

Also, remember to use " not ' in dialogue, and seperate your dialogue, it gets confusing to read.
When you flashback, make sure to put it in bold italic, because it gets even more confusing.
Use something to seperate scenes, like a page breaker.
Get a beta maybe. Remember grammar is a slut, it likes when it's used 24/7. *

Aaaaaannddd... That's pretty much it.
SakuraApril chapter 1 . 6/26/2012
The storys really great so far...one thing though, the paragraphs are too long and scince the font is so small its harder to read...its probably just me cuz i lost my glasses but i just find it eaiser to read when the paragraphs are shorter...sorry
Loving New Dawn chapter 4 . 10/3/2011
Um...I haven't finished the enire story yet but...by any chance the evl cards names, did you get them from Fullmetal Alchemist?
ss chapter 19 . 3/10/2011
just so you know it's not Tokyo tower, it's just a radio tower, the story isn't held in Tokyo... unless in this version they are in Tokyo... then you'd want to mention that a little sooner
Sailor Meirue chapter 21 . 1/16/2011
a lovely story that was i really wnjoyed it
Purple Lace chapter 21 . 10/17/2010
I really enjoyed this story. Well done! :)
Will Kaisen chapter 21 . 10/14/2010
Impressive finish, lot's of thought and memory went into the story, may your next be as good.
Hellgirl8 chapter 3 . 10/2/2010
Please make it a bit mroe interesting and yeah...pls leave lines. It's all so crowded that we may feel like fainting. I'm not objecting ur story...it's just an advice. Kindly follow it in ur other stories. k?
AngelEmCuti chapter 21 . 9/11/2010
AW! KAWAII! _
lunarwing chapter 21 . 9/11/2010
AWWW it's over!

I enjoyed reading this and it was well written! keep it up!

~*lunarwing*~
Saki-Hime chapter 21 . 9/11/2010
What great questions Kero asks some times, lol. Great story, glad everything turned out great.
shirii chapter 2 . 8/19/2010
I really liked this chapter better than chapter one.

It had more...imagination put into it. ;D
shirii chapter 1 . 8/18/2010
Really good plot, but you need to learn how to separate your paragraphs in the right places and when there's dialogue you use " not '

O:

Sorry!
Will Kaisen chapter 20 . 8/8/2010
there we are then, a clever use of the cards for the ending. all in all a good story with an excellent plot. look forward to reading the epilogue.
AngelEmCuti chapter 20 . 8/3/2010
awesomeness! _
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