|Reviews for Explosive|
| MiyavaAria chapter 1 . 2/16/2010
It doesn't seem that ooc, I could see him acting like this at times.
A small piece of advice: its hard to follow whos talking in your story. If you seperate the other characters reactions from the others dialog then it will be easier to read.
Aside from that it was a really nice story and I enjoyed reading it.
I like Jess x Roxis. o_o
| shay-chama chapter 1 . 1/3/2010
nice job with those two
-diehard roxis x vayne fan-
| Gin Alucard chapter 1 . 10/24/2009
Nice job. . . Roxis and Jess looks so cute together. . .
| E.S. Simeon chapter 1 . 9/23/2008
Well, for a story with Roxis and Jess, it is quite nice. Although there could be more descriptions to the story to make it better pictured. Still, the parts with Roxis and Jess is quite fine, and don't worry about the OOCness. I can see that this is a one-shot and it needed to move quick, buy if it was chaptered you would probably be able towards the pairing gradually without OOCness.
| Gwencreyr chapter 1 . 7/11/2008
Cute story :) Jess and Roxis make an interesting pair, and I like how you kept it subtle! Could use technical polish, but everyone seems comfortably in-character to me, even if you had doubts. I'm also looking forward to seeing you write more about Mana Khemia, if inspiration ever strikes!
| sakura-kinomoto-li-syaoran chapter 1 . 6/24/2008
OMG! FINALLY MORE MANA KHEMIA STORIES~
o... jess and roxis... not a bad pairing~!
man come up with more mana khemia works pls?~~