Reviews for What Ed doesn't know chapter 1 . 12/6/2009
that is not fair, that damn bum hahaha (blaming edward). no next chapter?
Cagallirocks chapter 1 . 1/12/2009
very nice story. would be better if it was longer (not the chapter just a few more chapters). but Winry saving Ed. that was great (needed in the show so badly). Maybe you could make it into a chapter story. like how winry saved Ed ie. what her powers are.

and Ed and Al finding out she saved them. that would be awsome.

xoxo CR
Peanuckle chapter 1 . 9/30/2008
Not bad at all, but it looks like this story was written in a hurry. There's one big issue I see:

Envy dies from a single gunshot - Homunculi are notoriously difficult to kill, requiring a special transmutation circle as well as the physical remains of the original human. A bullet simply wouldn't do the job.

Other than that, this was a nice story.