Reviews for More Than Your Captain
Rina Eve chapter 14 . 7/15/2014
answers:
1. this story is awesome! i can't wait for the next chapter to be updated!
2. a little of this pairing would be acceptable in this story because this fic. is mainly TezRyo. fuji and atobe's relationship... you can say that the partnership of those two is acceptable at the moment.
3. what do i feel about Tez and Ryo's relationship...? they are getting some were, but pls. don't let fuji-kun and atobe-kun to meddle or cause anymore problem with Tez and Ryo's relationship. not very much OOC, you will be OOC as well when you fell in love. nope, they are taking things just fine, its just fast because of fuji-kun's meddlesome ways of interference.
hopelessfreakz chapter 14 . 6/20/2014
Pls update this soon! :-(
Already too long absent.
Ichigosberrymix chapter 14 . 5/19/2013
1. What do you think of the story so far?
It is intersting but maybe you should add more romantic scenes without kissing or with kissing and something more(..blushes..)
2. What do you think of Fuji's relationship with Atobe? Did it made you wonder? Do you want it to continue in this story? -well i can't imagine these two together but if this story is your so even if they are going out i won't complain.
3. How do you feel about Tez and Ryo's relationship so far? Were they too out of character? Were they taking things too fast? etc... at times the were a little out of character but still if they aren't it will be hard to insert romance.
The weasel is MINE XP chapter 14 . 10/23/2012
:) great story! I can't wait to read more, so please update soon! -MnM
Siblings-Curse chapter 14 . 3/6/2012
Siblings: I, Siblings, am now swearing that yes, I do forgive Fuji Syuuske for all the trouble he caused in the past.

Curse: And I, Curse, am now officially creeped out by Siblings.

Both: And UPDATE!
Siblings-Curse chapter 13 . 3/6/2012
That bumps getting real big now! Like a mountain!

Siblings and Curse
Siblings-Curse chapter 12 . 3/6/2012
Siblings: Trouble in paradise!

Curse: I'll never understand you...
Siblings-Curse chapter 11 . 3/6/2012
bumps in the road are coming...uh-oh...

Siblings and Curse
Siblings-Curse chapter 10 . 3/6/2012
Siblings: *is staring off into space*

Curse: Believe it or not, I'm the guy, and Siblings is the girl. And like any other girl, she's now imagining Echizen in a skirt.

Siblings: I can't help it! He's petite, an small, and has big eyes, and semi-long hair! Put a corset on him, add a few extensions to his hair, and put him in a skirt and he'll look like a really pretty pre-teen!

Curse: I know. I HAVE seen him - in my head - in one of those.

Siblings: O.O Pervert.

Curse: *Eye twitch* NOT LIKE THAT!
Siblings-Curse chapter 9 . 3/6/2012
...Who's the dude?

Siblings and Curse
Siblings-Curse chapter 8 . 3/6/2012
Siblings: Sah...I wonder...

Curse: OK, dude, stop acting like Fuji. It's creepy.

Siblings: I'm not acting. THAT'S HOW I AM! *Bomps on head* Idiot.

Curse: But you love me anyways.

Siblings: Only because you keep me warm when we sleep.

Curse: Anyways, what were you wondering about?

Siblings: When their little 'relationship' will be left out for the world to see.
Siblings-Curse chapter 7 . 3/6/2012
*Snorts* Echizen's acting like a girl! *laughs*

Siblings and Curse
Siblings-Curse chapter 6 . 3/6/2012
Siblings: Tezuka...

Curse: Yeah...

Both: He's a jealous/possesive person isn't he?
Siblings-Curse chapter 5 . 3/6/2012
Put more details in the wording. Like explaining what happens at certain parts, and just more details in what the characters do. This'll help you raise your word count, and quite possibly attract more readers who are looking for long stories.

Siblings and Curse
Siblings-Curse chapter 4 . 3/6/2012
Siblings: OK! First critique!

Curse: *Nods head*

Siblings: When writing...

Curse: Don't be so formal.

Siblings: Yeah...I remember a sentence 'kissing the forehead of Echizen'

Curse: That's too formal.

Siblings: If you want the readers to feel what your writing,

Curse: Write it in a less formal tone

Siblings: Like 'Planting a kiss on his forehead, his lips lingering, before pulling back'

Curse: That'll help a lot.

Both: That's it!
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