So you can't even read the FIRST book carefully, right? McGonagall took away not 50 points from Malfoy, but only 20. But who really cares indeed.

To be honest, I find the whole fact of using Harry Cruciatus on Amicus Carrow very strange. I mean, Harry used it because of... McG. Yes, spitting can be considered an insult and all that, she is a good teacher in her own right, but... Let's be honest, 96% of the plot she is absolutely useless as a responsible, reasonable adult who works with children/teenagers and has to educate them somehow. and if Harry's first attempt to apply Cruciatus is more or less justified, because Sirius was actually the last member of his family (although, depending on who thinks what about James' parents, Harry's family can also be considered Tonks, but it doesn't matter now) and Harry still didn't succeed, but that before the Battle of Hogwarts... it was so irrational that I noticed it even when I read DH for the first time. it is important to clarify here that I began to notice all the plot holes already when I reread the series closer to the end of my studies at the university.
Besides, Hermione needs to throw a stone at herself first (and more than one). because, well, in the second year she stole ingredients from Snivellus (and no matter how bastard and asshole he was, unfortunately, he still had the status of a teacher), in the third year she took advantage of the Time Turner to organize the escape of a man who was considered a mass murderer at that time (and when I adore Sirius his murderer status remained that way because of Wormtail's escape a little earlier), and a few more that it makes no sense to list taking into account what has already been said.

aaand you are once again demonstrating your inattentiveness in reading books. and so it is when Dumbles and Snape in the memories discuss the Ferret's... pardone, Malfoy Jr's attempts to kill Dumbledore, he says that Malfoy's soul can still be saved (yes, let's close our eyes to 2 assassination attempts this year and one 3 years earlier at the end of the 3rd book, when he, along with Flint, Crabbe and Goyle, pretended to be dementors, or how in the second book, he walked around the school and dreamed out loud that the mudbloods would finally be slaughtered), and Snape asks what about his soul, aaand... Dumbledore leaves this unanswered. what is the most logical conclusion from this? for reasonable people this will mean that Snivellus has already killed someone once, so it makes no sense to worry about his soul. and all the idiots who defend it should think about the fact that this is all canon, and if you ignore it, you will only demonstrate your idiocy.

one more comment on the 1st chapter
it just dawned on me. didn't the same thing happen in Harry's 6th year? Malfoy was going to use Cruciatus against Harry (and, as we learn later, successfully used Imperius against Rosmerta even earlier), Potter defended himself as best he could, but for some reason it wasn't the malicious Slytherin who was punished again. at the same time, both Barty Jr. and Bellatrix made it very clear that just shouting "Crucio", "Imperio" or "Avada Kedavra" and hoping for a miraculous hocus pocus will not work. YOU HAVE TO KEEP THAT IN MIND. in addition, 99% of wizards (and witches, huh) fail their 99% spells on the first attempt. that is, they must first practice from 2 to infinity times. So, are you and the rest of the idiots going to keep saying that Dumbledore's favorites end up in Gryffindor? It doesn't look like a (not)funny joke as much as possible.

it's outdated even for me because I wrote about it in the comments to the third chapter, besides, it's been more than a decade and a half since publication, but Harry didn't know about the existence of the mirror until the end of OotP
to be honest, now I'm not sure what scares me more. the fact that you read books so inattentively, or that over the past decade and a half you have not found the desire to correct this mistake. or, to make this one-shot viable separately indicate that you are aware that the mirror did not officially appear until the end of the book.

You know what? With your comment after the chapter you only confirmed that you read the books very inattentively. Why? Because Harry LITERALLY DIDN'T KNOW ABOUT THE MIRROR until the moment he returned to the dorm after the fight at the Ministry and didn't unwrap the package Sirius had given him. So, please tell me, HOW THE F*CK COULD HE use an item HE didn't have the SLIGHTEST IDEA about? Oops... And this is the second time that you ignore / distort facts from books, which very strongly subjects all your statements (especially about the logical Hermione Granger, who in the canon actually completely forgot about logic after the end of the 1st book) to very strong doubt. Oops... again?

Tell me honestly, when you wrote this, did you already read the 7th book? because at the end of the DH, when Harry (and we) see the Snivellus' memories, it is very well painted that he was younger than at the time of the incident when he was talking to Lily, trying to convince her that something was wrong with Remus. and he KNEW FOR SURE Remus was a werewolf by the time of the incident itself. So... on the night of the full moon, Snape left the Slytherin common room (violating curfew!), went out onto the school grounds, and then just went and met with a transformed werewolf (I want to note that NO ONE FORCED HIM to do this), who himself was not going to meet with him and did not threaten him in any way until then he got into the underground passage that led to the Shrieking Hut... and I have important question: why did he go there? to kill said werewolf in cold blood. then why all the idiots who furiously jerk off to Snivellus REALLY going to falsely claim Sirius tried to kill him? in addition, greasy bastard who did not receive ANY punishment not only for violating the rules of Hogwarts (and perhaps a couple of laws, but we do not know it for sure), but also for the attempted murder of another student blatantly lying in the face of others about that incident. It's bad enough JKR has completely turned over the facts she herself came up with to whitewash the bastard, but it's much worse when people ignore it and just keep defending him. Bravo!

I get it with the Molly and Ginevra (Ginny) to be honest.

check your verbiage.

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Sorry but snape already knew lupin was a were, he went down there to kill him probably with the Sectumsempra which he created at hogwarts.

From this chapter:
"(...) "If they don't they don't need time off for it. Since they live with the family they work for I'm sure if they do fall ill, they'll have time to recover. And since all their food and board is paid for, what would they really need wages for?" Harry asked sensibly.

"Personal items," Hermione replied promptly. (...)"

Soo...
I don't think I have ever seen someone countering Hermione's argument with something like "do you pay your mother for cooking or cleaning for you?"
After all... outside families like the Malfoys... shouldn't them be "part of the family for generations"?

Love them

Even though this is over ten years later, I must comment about your comment "I can't believe the Brits give that much power over students to the headmaster":
You will agree that the 'wizardworld' society is still living as if they were in Victorian England?
In Victorian England (and even into the 1940's), the headmaster did indeed have that much power over the students in their domain. This includes caning and other corporal punishments.
But as the previous chapter describes, it is difficult to realize that people are so illogical (and yet I have seen so many examples of this, even today),

Lol. Yeah, I never got the appeal, either.

Maybe a sappy "they were always meant for each other" deal, but the stupid "you're married now" or "soul bond markings" are... ugh.

I have tolerated such stories, but only if they had other things going on.

The only possible thing I actually think is interesting is the constant telepathy... if it was actually explored correctly, and the people in question actually loved each other beforehand. It would pretty much have to be the main focal point to get enough detail to be interesting, though, and the author would have to thoroughly understand the way both boys and girls think, hormones included.

(If true understanding existed, and actual love was there, what room would there be for jealousy and overreaction? Reassurance would be instant. Not that there aren't interesting difficulties anyway.)