Reviews for Open Your Eyes
creaturebelowthedeck chapter 5 . 5/10/2014
Please continue this! :D I love the idea of Ratchet as a pirate, especially the captain! X3 I even wrote a pirate "shanty" based on this. :)
Samu chapter 5 . 11/7/2009
I would love to see more of this story sometime. The plot has been really interesting so far, and I'd love to see Ratchet get his memory back (or learn more about "what happened last time". I always enjoy seeing the Dread Pirate Ratchet, so it's neat to see that the pirates have picked him up after his amnesia.
Stephen Stryker chapter 5 . 8/22/2008
Just in case, some spoilers coming.

I rather agree with some of the others about the lack of emotions in odd parts. Everyone (but Ratchet) should have had a pretty good freak out over Clank's reappearance out of nowhere. Don't be afraid to milk those emotions. Of course in my case, they're downright being flogged! ;P

I know the Zoni aren't completely cannon, but then this is your fic and you can do with it what you want. I'm sure interested in what they're all about though. WRITE MORE! ;D

Do you feel rushed because school or work is pressing? Oh well, aside from the weird typos and misplaced whatnots, I have no complaints. You might use the built in spell checker in the editor here if you can't get hold of another computer.

I must say you NEED to devote more quality time to this fic! The idea is very novel and I'm really curious as to how Ratchet got there, and just why the Zoni made off with Clank in the first place. Did I mention you need to WRITE MORE! ;D
Anime Fan18.0 chapter 1 . 8/22/2008

Blech...this isn't a good day for me... To make a long review short, the story's intresting and you have us on an interesting cliff-hanger. Now, I must go bang my head on the wall for being such an idiot...

Signed: AnimeFan18.0
Anime Fan18.0 chapter 5 . 8/22/2008
Um...yeah, I feel stupid... Can't believe I didn't notice the fifth chapter.

""Yeah, sure. We'll meet you...wherever." The lombax snapped, using the communications number to set the autopiolet, "But I have some pirates to throttle in the meantime." With that, he spun on his heel and stalked away from the commincations unit.

"You were serious about the space pirate thing, then?""

You forgot to make Al's line another paragraph. Also, when Talwyn said "Just the usual insanity, here at Apogee Station...", you added an unessicary comma. Other than that, I don't remeber seeing anything. I do believe you have us on a cliffhanger as far as Willy and Talwyn go. Not to mention Ratchet
Anime Fan18.0 chapter 4 . 8/22/2008
(Does a double take) Huh? Ratchet? A space pirate? Huh...I must say, this is rather an origional concept. Your portrayal of the Zoni is a little off however. They always talk in unison, and they don't have seperate personalities. Also, to my knowledge, they're genderless. Also, it's confusing that most of the Zoni agreed that Clank was still needed to help Ratchet complete his purpose and allowed him to leave. Doesn't that defeat the purpose of them taking Clank in the first place?

Also, how come Talwyn, Cronk, Zephyr, OR Aphelion never asked where Clank ran off to? Or what happened to him? Also, I think chapter three and four would have been better if they were combined into one big chapter. The shortness is kind of messing up the flow of the story.

Aside from this, the story looks good so far. Your idea is definetely intresting, and the plot twist completely caught me off guard! I look foward to your next chapter!

Signed: Anime Fan18.0
TheGrudge154 chapter 1 . 8/18/2008
Wow, I'm impressed. A very interesting story and an interesting concept! Keep it up and update soon :)
dragonscale876 chapter 5 . 8/15/2008
Wo more please. This is awesome and i must read more. I love what you have done with this. Cant wait to see the next chapter. Hope its soon!
leavingyouforme chapter 5 . 8/15/2008
You did indeed some bigger errors but nothing that would disrupt the flow (although you should of course spell-correct it as soon as you can). One of the most outstanding errors is in "lank was sure that it would be impossible for Ratchet to get their ..." - you meant "Clank", not "lank". ;D

This is the best chapter so far, it's funny, insightful, and did I say I funny? XD I liked the part with Willy although I'd have loved to see more of Clank's and Ratchet's thoughts - I've got to admit, though, that it was very insightful and discrete of Ratchet to leave.

The only thing which bothered me more is the lack of description on Clank's part in the end. I mean, Ratchet not only repeated something from the events before Clank went with the Zoni, but repeated word for word the most hurtful thing he had said to him. A little more description on Clank's reaction and thoughts would have been nice because he should have been more shocked.

Apart from this, this scene is very good. It's probably no coincidence that Ratchet remebered exactly this part now that Clank was with him again - I think he's blaming Clank going with the Zoni and leaving him behind; Clank just needs to figure this out now. But what had this Zoni to do with it?

Just one last question: Why did Clank think of Azimuth?
CommanderRatchet57 chapter 4 . 7/27/2008
Great chapter. Write one today! I am on the edge of my seat. By the way, what did you mean on my story by is this my usual pairing?
ZGory chapter 2 . 7/13/2008
I liked your story so much that I did go to deviantart to look the rest of it up. I must say that I can't wait to see what happens in chapter five.

For this chapter, I'm glad that Clank is getting a good start in looking for Ratchet. I also hope that when the Zoni come there's someone around to shoot those evil little self righteous kidnappers.
Stephen Stryker chapter 2 . 7/6/2008
Well, another Stryker here, what a surprise!

Anyway, great timing with the update. But YES it's short! Gee whiz, I finished chapter 2 in just a few minutes it seems... but then mine are all novella sized almost... ;-P

But by all means, if you have something to say in your story, don't whack it out. I love little details - again, self evident, right? ;-)

Update again soon, and grab a friend's PC with Word or something!
Millen Stryker chapter 2 . 7/5/2008
I really like this story and since this is one of those post-TOD fics, this is the first (well, probably a few(?)) that broke the "finding Clank" plot mold.

Anyway, if you need help on figuring out the personalities of the TOD characters, I suggest going to Youtube and search for TOD cutscenes. I hope that helps.
Nobility chapter 2 . 7/4/2008
Clank searching for Ratchet- how big a twist is that compared to all the TOD sequel fics? :)

Anyway. A little quiet chapter, but good, I like your characterization of Aphelion. I hope she returns for the next game, I do like her. Also, remember to finish every quote with a period, exclamation point, question mark, or a comma.
knAngel18 chapter 1 . 7/4/2008
I like it so far! I hope you update soon, I'm interested to see what happens next _
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