|Reviews for Brilliant First or Second Best?|
| magdilen chapter 1 . 12/5/2008
| MochaCocaFan chapter 1 . 9/21/2008
| Bre Henson chapter 1 . 7/4/2008
This is so wonderfully written, and absolutely fun to read!
| Sarahfreak chapter 1 . 6/29/2008
I really quite enjoyed reading this fic. It has a certain air around it that detached it from the darkness that is portrayed throughout Death Note. You did make Wammy's a sanctuary of sorts and I really do love how you wrote Mello and Near (each with their own redeeming traits). Overall a great little story. Great writing. Loved it!
| alexz-square chapter 1 . 6/26/2008
Loved it, loved it, loved it! The way you portrayed the characters, specially Near and Mello was amazing, so true!
This particular line “People at the orphanage aren’t worth my time. I’m not here for them.” Did you make that up yourself or it it from the manga/anime, if you wrote that, kudos, it fits Near per-fec-tly. You also caught Mello's personality in a snap, it's just so true! The chocolate thing was a nice touch. A suggestion for a future fic : L with the book he picked in the library, I would definitely like to read more about this and how exactly it changed his life.
So once again, Jue hits the spot! This is one of my top fics ever, if not the one. I love it!
| Cam chapter 1 . 6/25/2008
Hey Jue! LOVE the dedication! :P Anyways, awesome story! I love it. :D Keep up the good work ! *hug*
| I-Heart-Hatake-Kakashi chapter 1 . 6/25/2008
potential Suitors? for L?... sounds awesome...lol...
ok... first off, I've got to say... I notice a completely different approach in your DN fics over your Naruto fics... you seem to emphasis description a lot more... which I understand (and am SO no saying it's bad on either side)... DN is a lot easier to paint in a dark manner, and I think you capture that very well. ;)
next, I gotta say i LOVE LOVE LOVE how L was introduced in this fic ( i stopped reading to type this, so I'm assuming "Watari… Could you move, please?" is L... so funny, started cracking up there... it's so fitting to L...lol)
AH... omg Jue I so hate you right now! the line above "middle-aged boy" kept bugging me... I was wondering, 'well is he middle-aged (i.e. 40-50) or is he a boy?' and omg, he's 23! that is SO not middle aged! I should so just stop reading! you're so mean!...sorry, bit sensitive here... already suffering on account of turning 25 in exactly 2 weeks, now according to your story, I'm already middle-aged... so mean!
but i'll continue...
"identity of your future suitor"... i'm starting to wonder if you meant "successor"... huh... I still want it to be suitor though... it'd be funny XP
"Deciding that answering would be somehow improper..." I'm pretty sure THERE you meant "asking"... sorry if I'm being a little nitpicky... my legal writing professor's got me thinking much more about sentence structure and word choices and grammar, in general... XP
again, gotta say, i love your description of the place, especially all the connections to memories... lovely.
o... Near... yeah that sound like... lol
i still think 10 is a child though... ee... the whole "pre-teen" thing... they'd probably all kill me, but as far as I'm concerned anyone under 10 is still a baby, and anyone under 16 is still a kid... mind you, there's a few maturer ones out there, but still...
agh... now *I'M* making myself feel old... lol
"L took a few moments to digest the idea of Near officially becoming his suitor." ... yeah I think you definitely meant successor...
“What I do?”... got me confused... "What IF I do?" sorry... sorry...
yeah, yeah... Near is dispassionate... unlike Mello, who has a little too much passion...
hahahaha "Near has my obsession of being a quiet weirdo. I would like you to share an obsession with me as well."... hahaha... and then the chocolate... funny... lol
aw... sweet... but I kind of now want you do to an actual Suitor story (L, having to pick a wife... XP... that would be so hilarious... hehehe) anyway... congrats on the new story... I think plenty happened... like i said, your DN fics have a different tone to them... they're not a actiony, but there's still plenty going on... good job!
| marly chapter 1 . 6/25/2008
that was cute