|Reviews for The Wall of Naruto|
| Kilei chapter 4 . 10/31/2010
interesting story you have there. Keep it up.
| Sai'mne chapter 4 . 5/13/2009
make naruto merge with oturan
| Sai'mne chapter 3 . 5/12/2009
| Bukama Stealth chapter 4 . 12/27/2008
Very nice so far but you should watch your grammar a bit.
See the example below I wrote a correct form below it:
”With pleasure.” The next Kiba came and try smacking an animalistic and savage slug to Naruto. Naruto quickly did a cartwheel to the side but soon felt a massive kick to his right side of his body. He almost exclaimed in pain as Kiba grabbed him with talons and dug them inside Naruto’s arm. The extra pain didn’t really occur to Naruto until Kiba flung him to the other side of the battlefield.
Naruto grunted, as he didn’t find his wounds heal up.
”With pleasure.” The other Kiba responded and tried to animalisticly and savagely slug Naruto. Naruto quickly did a cartwheel to the side but soon felt a massive kick to his right side. He almost screamed in pain as Kiba grabbed him with his claws and dug them into Naruto’s arm. The added pain didn’t really occur to Naruto until Kiba flung him to the other side of the battlefield.
Naruto grunted, as he noticed that his wounds didn’t heal.
I recommend you get a beta editor... or at least wait two days and then check it yourself. This has a lot off potential.
See ya around I'll start checking out a few off your other fics next.
| Kammari chapter 4 . 7/17/2008
hmm interesting so far.
| phantomshadowdragon chapter 4 . 7/14/2008
I kinda feel sorry for Oturan, it must suck to be locked away for so many years. ...Why do I feel the same connection between the Naruto/Oturan problem and the Timmy/Gary problem? . I watch too many cartoons. As much as being told your not real sucks, Naru-chibi could at least try to get along with his other half. At least Oturan isn't trying to eat his soul or threatening to destroy his mind like Kyuubi's done.
| phantomshadowdragon chapter 3 . 7/14/2008
I hope Naruto does better then pooting in Kiba's face this time. Even if it was funny and very humiliating for Kiba. XD
| phantomshadowdragon chapter 2 . 7/14/2008
Poor Naru-chibi. He's got a slight case of M.P.D. doesn't he?
| Thewolfofthenight chapter 4 . 7/10/2008
So its sorta gonna be like in bleach between ichigo and his inner hollow?
| Alexander the Indiscriminate chapter 4 . 7/9/2008
It's great to see that you're improving your writing skills as you are going along with your story. I can't really think of anything to improve your writing other than you need to describe the scene more in order to slow down the pace of the story and allow the reader time to catch up, that way the reader can get more involved, y'get me?
Gotta say though really impressed with the "other" Natuto's speaking pattern here. It really does show that the story does have potential, but you need to just improve your general style more or less, kay?
Keep going and remember:
Be Your True Mind
| HeWhoWatchesFromTheMist chapter 4 . 7/7/2008
Sweet fic you got here...
heres a little help for you :P
Gatsuuga DOUBLE piercing fang...
dual double piercing fang?
Tsuuga is piercing fang, as in just Kiba, it becomes Gatsuuga when Akamaru joins in, k.
glad I could help.
| Your hater chapter 4 . 7/7/2008
Dude your story sucks ass and so do you.
| Akira Stridder chapter 1 . 7/7/2008
| Darksnider05 chapter 4 . 7/7/2008
So we have to watch retard hide from the truth... eh
| Midnight E Siren chapter 3 . 7/6/2008
You people have lot's of problems translating... Shishi Rendan means Lion's Barrage, just like Kage Bushin means Shadow Clone, teme means bastard and dobe means dead-last I enjoy translating things! You know Kage! Like Hokage means Fire Shadow! XD Lots of people can't seem to understand that but you've used it better than most! I really like your story but I'm still kinda confused about the good naru being bad and the bad naru being good... doesn't make much sense to me... but I really like the story! Hope you update soon! I love the Naru v. Kiba fight! u