|Reviews for Through the Flames and Fire|
| QueenBoo21 chapter 2 . 4/10/2014
I think that this story had promise, and pretty likable OCs compared to what I've seen in others. :) I'm a bit disappointed that you haven't had the opportunity to continue, because I really like where you were going with this! If you ever feel like you want to continue this story, I give you my total encouragement. :D
| Jane the Unknowing chapter 2 . 8/22/2011
That's really sad, Although I bet you were gonna have Rye get killed (mostly because he is an original charector that would have no place farther along)And I must admit, This is better than anything I've written, and I also see why you didn't complete it. I have no idea what would have happened right after that. I mean, what could? Writter's block strikes again...
| ADarknessInHeaven chapter 2 . 8/15/2009
...Intriguing. Looking forward to how all this ends up...keep up the good work!
| MidnightMoonOasis chapter 2 . 7/26/2009
aw that was really sad. But I do like where you are going with this fic and I can't wait for the next chapter! Good work! Write more soon!
| Starlightlovesya123 chapter 2 . 5/27/2009
This is really good! I've always loved Silver's character and this take on his past was really interesting. Please, please update soon!
| fhfhfhhhrh chapter 2 . 4/27/2009
I'm really happy you decided to carry on with this story. I found your way of writing quite gripping, and it seems you have enough dialogue to make the scene even more interesting, as I find stories with no dialogue to be quite tedious and plain. Good work, in my opinion. I just spotted an error:
You wrote: I, can walk
You don't have to have a comer after the I. But, if Bean was stuttering his words, that could be correct. Although I always thought it would be like this:
"I-I can walk."
I also think Ry is quite a great OC to have. See you next chapter!
| The Daily Dude chapter 1 . 4/26/2009
Only my favorite word can describe this story
| fhfhfhhhrh chapter 1 . 1/29/2009
Wow. I find the way you write really good! Now, when it comes to criticism, I'm the LAST person you should ask for that. This is a nice one-shot, and has got good description in it.
| Frozen Nitrogen chapter 1 . 6/27/2008
A very nice account of the cutscene. And you get a lot of bonus points for use of the word "anthropomorphic".
If this is how a first attempt looks, I can't wait to see your multi-chaptered tale arrive on the scene.
It's a bit of a petty point for me to make, but in the absence of any other real faults for me to constructively criticise about:
"Silver’s thoughts were interrupted when he heard a familiar voice call out his name in the distance. Silver quickly spun around to see, sure enough, Blaze the Cat standing on top of one of the burnt buildings. Silver looked at her closely, eyeing every detail."
You say that, and then don't say what any of those details ARE, beyond mentioning that Blaze is violet a couple of lines down.
It's probably fair to say that everyone reading this already knows full well what Blaze looks like, but that little paragraph is just screaming out to be followed by at least a cursory description. Especially when you could use it to showcase how Silver idolises her.
I eagerly await moe of your good works!