|Reviews for After the Vault|
| Raven Azura Ivy chapter 18 . 2/22
That was awesome. Amazing. I loved every second of it. From Abigail's surfacing to the very end I was enthralled. Thank you so much for this. I hope Abigail doesn't sue me because I am totally stealing the Bag of Swag!
| Guest chapter 4 . 5/3/2013
Wow abbys an effen badass eh, this is the best chapter yetvin my humble oppinion, easy to read, I read the whole chapter in one sitting (usually I break a few times) your very good with words, lookin forward to chapter five..
| Guest chapter 3 . 5/3/2013
Off I go to chapter 4, your a good writer bro, im not the most edjumacated dude but I find this to be a good read.
| Guest chapter 1 . 5/3/2013
Good start brah..
| castle of glass chapter 18 . 2/2/2013
This needs a sequel. Like seriously. Like seriously serious. Like so serious it's serious. Like more serious than serious. Which is serious.
| Seven chapter 8 . 5/24/2012
Since this is the end of the "first arc" I thought this would be a good place to review. I am really liking this story so far and I am really looking forward to see where the "second arc" will go.
| Seven chapter 1 . 5/21/2012
A very promising start.
| Netherphoenix chapter 1 . 5/6/2012
Really awesome, this was a great read, something that I will come back to a few times :)
| Yak chapter 18 . 10/24/2011
I posted this review on a fanfic forum. It's only fair that I copy-paste it here, for Nutzoide.
Wow. That was a good Fallout story. It's much better than New California Dreaming.
The characters are well developed. They aren't cardboard cut outs. Chopper is particularly complicated. Abigail's character growth through the fic is gradual and pleasing. She starts off as a sheltered vault-girl who's lost and bewildered in the Wastelands. Her skills are used, grown, and expanded.
Abigail also isn't a little miss perfect, nor is she just an angsty character who were supposed to feel sympathy for. She makes mistakes. She isn't instantly accepting of mutants. She falls down and her team mates have to pick up the pieces more than once.
The setting is well realised. It's easy to imagine these characters trekking through the post-nuclear mid-west of the USA. One gripe with the setting is that there were no obvious American landmarks. Abigail spends some time in the ruins of a city, but it's never clear which one it is.
Perhaps the biggest let down is the plot. There's no driving force behind it until the very end. For much of the fic I knew I was reading a well crafted story, but it wasn't a compelling one. I never felt that "I have to read the next chapter to find out what happens next!" which I get from favourite fics. The plot is Abigail's character growth and the things that happen to her which push that growth. It's only half of a good plot, imo. So in that respect, I found the story a little lacking. I could have stopped reading halfway through and not felt any urge to return to the story. It came together in the end, though.
That said, this is better than almost all of the other tripe out there. It loses half a point for the weak, character driven plot, which rounds down to 4/5.
I recommend that you give this a try. [I]After the Vault[/I] and [I]New California Dreaming[/I] are like night and day. NCD's characters are shallow, unfunny cliches in comparison.
| alex chapter 18 . 8/24/2011
That was amazing, man. Seriously the best fanfic I've read, you balanced the drama very well, never going over the top with it, the action was good and nothing felt forced. The ending was so good, I couldn't think of anything better than that, it gave me that feeling that you have when you finish reading something really good and you get kind of sad because it ended.
You have to get on writing a sequel, there's so much potential there for more stories. Anyway, that's a 10 out of 10 fanfic, anyone who likes Fallout should read and those who don't like too.
| hi chapter 16 . 8/11/2011
Ok well I've liked your story all the way up tp this point. The moment chopper chose to lie with erin just ruined the entire story for me, lol can't even bring myself to finish reading
| crimson katana chapter 18 . 5/7/2011
i loved this story, and would love to see a sequel. one thing though, you should be a little more descriptive in some things, like with lilis(?), the prostitute/negotiator; you really should have said what her mutation is, because otherwise, she is just another minor character.
| ScOut4It chapter 3 . 5/2/2011
This was just bad-ass:
"And," she said to Rathley, "I'll look forward to the day when I finally do lower myself to touching your prick for that very reason."
Coming out in the buff; why not ;)
| ScOut4It chapter 2 . 5/2/2011
This part made me laugh (and is probably an actual possibility if this were real which is just freaky):
The counter was dead - it was getting readings from itself, erratic ones at that...
So Chopper is just giving her tough love to help her, eh? Hmmm, I just hope that she isn't too butch about everything down the road. I wonder what she looks like without the dirt caking her face.
| ScOut4It chapter 1 . 5/2/2011
This was really professionally written and so very technically sound. Sounds dull right? Well that's the first time I've said 'that' in a review so it just stood out to me, which means that you're quality with a capital "Q"!
I am SO glad that you mentioned that it's not necessary to be familiar with that game, as I'm too tired and short on time to do my own homework just to be able to follow what the context of things are: YaY for a story that is complete by itself! Hip-hip-hurray!
Wonderful part here, 'She walked away from the retarded creature with a purpose.'
I could practically hear the Final Countdown playing in the background.
Wow; such a strong beginning, very striking events, such touching survivalist instincts, the powerful moment of blinding sunshine on top of burning radiation.
Thanks for writing, finishing, "M"-rating, F/Fing-Femslashing :D