Reviews for A Life Beginning
Guest chapter 9 . 2/21/2015
I think you could do with a beta to help you, you used due instead of do, there are Agee others mistakes which make it hard to read, some of the conversations aren't very natural.
Guest chapter 7 . 2/21/2015
This was confusing to read as it jumped about a lot, you need to insert some more spaces before scene changes. To help the reader, know what's happening, it's to jumbled together.
And in the UK where this is set it's called autum not fall.
Guest chapter 5 . 2/21/2015
British colleges and universities doesn't have a minor and major, you study one subject the whole time you are there. If you changed you would have to restart completing and been there another 3/4 years.
Guest chapter 2 . 2/21/2015
Some of the conversations are a bit stilted and not naural, not how the characters would talk.
The story idea and descriptions are good.
Why harry bought a pokey little flat with no bathroom? Sounds more like a bedsit.
Isoisoal chapter 11 . 1/7/2012
Rambling story. You still happy about Barak? Got a job yet?
librarywitch chapter 36 . 10/19/2011
glad you haven't walked away. I love the women folk cornering Hermione in the kitchen. That was scream!
librarywitch chapter 35 . 7/16/2011
know all about real life shooting the muse in the foot myself. I love this view of what harry is doing now that the war is over. Love it. You have got to catch up on the movies because DH2 is smokin A!
Insane Winxy chapter 32 . 3/6/2011
Good chap..
Insane Winxy chapter 33 . 3/6/2011
Yes, crooks shud show up again and scratch harrys face out..
Insane Winxy chapter 4 . 3/6/2011
WTF does the chapter name mean?
librarywitch chapter 33 . 3/3/2011
Ah, so that is how you can peg college life so well! Good job on Ron's views on how things are. This is a refreshingly normal look at an almost normal life for Harry and Hermoine. Thanks fo sharing.
librarywitch chapter 32 . 2/14/2011
A nice look at how things have changed. Thanks for sharing.
MartinDeShade chapter 30 . 12/2/2010
Why wouldn't they use skelegrow for the lost teeth?
Heksie chapter 29 . 11/9/2010
sweet did like the catching up.. way to go.
librarywitch chapter 29 . 11/9/2010
Loved the part of the story with Arthur and the computer. Thanks for another chapter.
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