|Reviews for Fast Food and Play Lands|
| Lipstick Lullabiesx chapter 1 . 7/5/2008
| Loser911 chapter 1 . 7/4/2008
haha this was awesome! but now im afraid to go back to those little play grounds...
| TangibleDarkness chapter 1 . 7/4/2008
who gets horny in mcdonalds? i mean...besides my bf?
| LolaluvsEdward chapter 1 . 7/3/2008
haha poor kids, they have no idea whats happening! :P
| FreeBorn chapter 1 . 7/3/2008
lmao, that's just hilarious.
| minipoison chapter 1 . 7/3/2008
wow i actually ate at McDonalds today... that makes me think... i still love McDonalds! heheheh
| RedStrippedRae Sama chapter 1 . 7/2/2008
| NeteleJala chapter 1 . 7/2/2008
Um...let me conpose myself...
That was...well, hot is an understatement...I think you should write a sequel witht hte ball pit, thought i have to say, that is very inappropriate...maybe they could sneak back at night?
| Narika chapter 1 . 7/2/2008
I like this. A LOT.
I was thoroughly amused by imagining Edward Cullen at a McD's playplace. xD
| MinniMuffin chapter 1 . 7/2/2008
*runs to the nearest McDonald's as fast as possible*
Hahaha... Hilarious! LoL!
| edwardsothalova chapter 1 . 7/2/2008
yet another place I will never look at the same way! haha! great... love it!
| Lollirotxox chapter 1 . 7/2/2008
Well, this was certainly an origional idea ]
I have the slightest bit of constructive criticsm, though. Edward seems...a bit too perverted? I guess you could say? But I suppose that after holding back for so long, and since you made it clear that this was not their first time, I suppose they would be more intimate and comfortable with each other.
Anyways, I liked it ]
| All.The.Pretty.Corpses chapter 1 . 7/2/2008
omc that's hilarious! UPDATE! I wanna see what happens in the ball pit.
| bitten-sln chapter 1 . 7/2/2008
i love it XD hmm maybe you could take that ball pit idea and write it out...hmm i dunno...i love your style of writing though
| Jackiswhack chapter 1 . 7/2/2008
come on, you left me hanging with the possibilty of the ball pit!
way to leave a cliffy
PLEASE do a sequel it would make me oh so happy and forever adore you in a totally non creepy way