Reviews for Fast Food and Play Lands
Lipstick Lullabiesx chapter 1 . 7/5/2008

Great. :D
Loser911 chapter 1 . 7/4/2008
haha this was awesome! but now im afraid to go back to those little play grounds...
TangibleDarkness chapter 1 . 7/4/2008
who gets horny in mcdonalds? i mean...besides my bf?
LolaluvsEdward chapter 1 . 7/3/2008
haha poor kids, they have no idea whats happening! :P
FreeBorn chapter 1 . 7/3/2008
lmao, that's just hilarious.
minipoison chapter 1 . 7/3/2008
wow i actually ate at McDonalds today... that makes me think... i still love McDonalds! heheheh

RedStrippedRae Sama chapter 1 . 7/2/2008
Love it!
NeteleJala chapter 1 . 7/2/2008

Um...let me conpose myself...

That was...well, hot is an understatement...I think you should write a sequel witht hte ball pit, thought i have to say, that is very inappropriate...maybe they could sneak back at night?
Narika chapter 1 . 7/2/2008
I like this. A LOT.

I was thoroughly amused by imagining Edward Cullen at a McD's playplace. xD
MinniMuffin chapter 1 . 7/2/2008
*runs to the nearest McDonald's as fast as possible*

Hahaha... Hilarious! LoL!
edwardsothalova chapter 1 . 7/2/2008
yet another place I will never look at the same way! haha! great... love it!


Lollirotxox chapter 1 . 7/2/2008
Well, this was certainly an origional idea ]

I have the slightest bit of constructive criticsm, though. Edward seems...a bit too perverted? I guess you could say? But I suppose that after holding back for so long, and since you made it clear that this was not their first time, I suppose they would be more intimate and comfortable with each other.

Anyways, I liked it ]
All.The.Pretty.Corpses chapter 1 . 7/2/2008
omc that's hilarious! UPDATE! I wanna see what happens in the ball pit.
bitten-sln chapter 1 . 7/2/2008
i love it XD hmm maybe you could take that ball pit idea and write it out...hmm i dunno...i love your style of writing though
Jackiswhack chapter 1 . 7/2/2008
come on, you left me hanging with the possibilty of the ball pit!

way to leave a cliffy

PLEASE do a sequel it would make me oh so happy and forever adore you in a totally non creepy way
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