Gah! The story was going so well... Unfortunately, seeing youki (the ki, or energy, of youkai) spelt youkai is a total let-down (one of my main pet peeves). Why everyone feels the need to add an a is beyond me. Ki doesn't have an a.

This my second read after an year. This is indeed a very good fic. A well put together, and I liked your characterisation of Hiruzen and Naruto. Over all, a very fantastic read. Really wished you into shippuden.

But, you still have some loose ends. Like, how many others pointed, why did Kumo kidnapped only one single woman, that too a child, when there's a clan full of proper woman who can give birth? Also, I felt that the replica village is very far fetched, but you do you. And it's shame that Hinata died after all side plot for her. Totally skipped the Uchiha and Hyuuga massacre or fight. Also, in last chapter, Hiruzen mention to Itachi that none of Uchiha in village are ninja, but we see that there's Naruto classmate with the name Uchiha Mamoru.
You actually manage to write some of my favourite characters as morons and made me angry at them. Fantastic writing again.
Over all a good read. Very good story.

WARNING! Carry on reading! Or you will die, even if you only looked at the word warning! Once there was a little girl called Clarissa, she was ten-years-old and she lives in a mental hospital, because she killed her mom and dad. She got so bad she went to kill all the staff in the hospital so the More-government decided that the best idea was to get rid of her so they set up a special room to kill her, as humane as possible but it went wrong the machine they were using went wrong. And she sat there in agony for hours until she died. Now every week on the day of her death she returns to the person that read this letter, on a Monday night at 12:00 a.m. She creeps into your room and kills you slowly, by cutting you and watching you bleed to death. Now send this to ten other pictures on the site, and she will haunt someone else who doesn't. This isn't fake, apparently, if you copy and paste this to ten comments in the next ten minutes you will have the best day of your life tomorrow

So it just straight up is a case of the Raikage being a moron.

Seriously, who kidnaps a five or six year old girl to breed a new bloodline when you could very easily kidnap any of the grown woman that you chose to kill instead?

Why on earth would they take Hinata for a breeding program?

Why wouldn't they take a Hyuuga that's actually of age, rather than one who wouldn't be able to give birth for six years?

Better question, why would they only take ONE?

Even before Sarutobi started changing things, this is a massive AU, huh?

After all, Mikoto was supposed to be one of Kushina's best friends. And Hiashi should have jumped at the chance to finally have the Hyuuga elders removed and the Cage Bird Seal abolished.

This was a great story, for the most part. It was nice to see Hiruzen sort things out and do what was needed, if not in the right ways. I did appreciate the decoy village and Hiruzen's successor solution, nice and dark.

But goddamn was that Hinata side-story insufferable, why the fuck would Kumo grab a girl and especially one so young. Women typically only give birth to one child per year and only reliably do so for around 30 years, that's horribly inefficient for a breeding program; and after her son was born Hinata was superfluous. The whole thing, with the exception of Kumo attacking and kidnapping Hyuga, was contrived.

Also can't help but wonder if he felt any remorse over any of hus actions during his dying moments. Killing both of his students, Jiraiya unaware of Tsunade's death, killing Itachis parents, the aftermaths of the Hyuga and Uchiha deserting the village, raising Naruto to be a double S-Rank threat. The hardest choices require the strongest wills as Thanos once put it.

Wow. That was a great read. I love how you delved into the cunning and treacherous psychological aspect of the ninja world, perfectly painting the sheer brutality and corruption seething within it. And of course in such a world the same threats still loom over the hidden village of konoha if not more extreme , Sarutobi Hiruzen had no choice to put on a brave face to pushbuck what je saw as the inevitable. He became an embodiment of the age old "the ends justify the means". Though to what end? He himself knew that the consequences of his actions will "wash itself out in blood soon enough". I wonder what he was thinking whilst taking his final breaths? That the future of Konoha is in good hands or that he left a whole big mess for Naruto clean up? I guess nothing is perfect, the cycle of hatred shall continue even in this world.

that was gorgeously made. Amazing read put a tear in my eye, thank you for he story

this is actually pretty great

WARNING! Carry on reading! Or you will die, even if you only looked at the word warning! Once there was a little girl called Clarissa, she was ten-years-old and she lives in a mental hospital, because she killed her mom and dad. She got so bad she went to kill all the staff in the hospital so the More-government decided that the best idea was to get rid of her so they set up a special room to kill her, as humane as possible but it went wrong the machine they were using went wrong. And she sat there in agony for hours until she died. Now every week on the day of her death she returns to the person that read this letter, on a Monday night at 12:00 a.m. She creeps into your room and kills you slowly, by cutting you and watching you bleed to death. Now send this to ten other pictures on the site, and she will haunt someone else who doesn't. This isn't fake, apparently, if you copy and paste this to ten comments in the next ten minutes you will have the best day of your life tomorrow

Wait so bee was the father of hinatas child it was his sperm that was used, shiiiittt

Daro

This story has genuinely disgusting and disturbing moments in it, the rating should be bumped up to an "M", but apart from that, there is absolutely nothing I can say in it's detriment other than I wish it were longer. It never shies away from what a world like the one depicted in Naruto would actually be like. It is brutal, it is dark, it is gruesome. It succeeds at what so many other fanfics on here have tried and failed to even come close to approaching. 9/10. It would be a 10/10 but I love Hinata and I will not apologise for that. It is a 10/10 if I put my preferences aside. Genuinely a brilliantly written story and I don't think that I could ever write praises high enough. More stories need to take inspiration from this