|Reviews for Taking Over Me|
| changeofheart505 chapter 1 . 3/10/2013
Nice... i like it
| salena98 chapter 1 . 8/10/2012
o..m..g...THIS HAS EVERYTHING now thi may just be the sugar talkig but this was tots AWESOME and you should TOTALLY do MORE!
| MistressChi08 chapter 1 . 10/18/2011
Hahahaha! Its great.. X'P
never imagine how emo become Zane? *LOL*
i love the part when Jesse said "if u want to know about my outfit don't ask!".. Hahaha! (o)'v poor Atty.. He's just curious that's all...
Tood bad for Haou (Supreme King).. How he rude he was.. And wow? Syrus? Did used neos deck of Jaden.. Ha! Poor Yubel.. He didn't win the duel.. (even i would love to Syrus lose..hehehe *evil smirk*) '3
lastly! I never expect the last was lemon! O.o... I think Jesse is really possess by horny perv of his other self.. Hahahaha! Nice! Keep it up! *wink*
| Jewel1001 chapter 1 . 4/19/2011
Loved it, really good fic :)
| Cat-Tuong chapter 1 . 2/27/2011
Pretty good job with the story ) Keep it up D
| LoveOfMyLifeIs chapter 1 . 5/14/2010
Lol it's so funny 'cause I'm thirteen and I read lemon daily I'll like die if a don't read at least one lemon a day! XD
| Krisel chapter 1 . 5/4/2010
Wanted to review like a long time ago, but I'm going to do it now. Nice disclaimer you got there. I think I can guess who was playing Johan and I think you were playing little Jay chan. Disclaimer made me laugh and since when did you have a pet Blue eyes named Charlie O.O
| ShikamaruNaraKibaNaruChunin chapter 1 . 2/21/2010
LOL you two are allways funny even on msn xd
| yumi2482 chapter 1 . 12/22/2009
great story, is Jesse possessed at the end or just horny?
| Artist2009 chapter 1 . 9/13/2009
lol i'm 15 and i'm reading lemon too lolz . liked the story too, although maybe could have said died instead of 4kids saying of sent to the stars.
| WhiteAsukalover chapter 1 . 5/10/2009
great job period
| Classy Abigail chapter 1 . 3/14/2009
Holy hamburgers! That was good stuff, Heatie. Very good yummy scrumbly tasty lemony stuff. Shame on your little 15 year old for writing such lemony material, and never mind the fact that I have a 13 year old writing one for me.
Two thumbs up!
| The Celtic Elven Mage-Warrior chapter 1 . 8/2/2008
OMR X0 WOOHO SQUE Huzza yayness DROOL SQUE
| Fanfiction's Lawbreaker chapter 1 . 7/14/2008
If nine out of ten people who review your fanfic ignore a large bit of mischaracterization, does it exist or are those nine people just glossing over it because they're in a hurry to get to th n?
Personally, I'm going for choice #2. And since I'm the tenth reviewer, I'm not going to gloss it over.
What you did to Zane is stupid. The absolute last thing he would ever do is back out of a duel because of his heart. His heart failing him is *why* he is searching for his ultimate duel in the first place. And he stated quite clearly that he wanted the chance to duel Jaden as Supreme King. He wouldn't go "ops, better not" and run away. He'd be shuffling his deck and demanding that Jaden make this worth all the effort. *He's going to die anyway* and he knows this, and he wants that last duel to be the ultimate duel of his life. WHY would he back off from it? EXPLAIN THIS. And do not do it with a handwave. You can't, you know. There IS no way to explain it in character.
You did that not only because of your obvious lack of understanding of his character, but just so you COULD leap to th n. What you did was more or less the samme thing as if he were starving to death, then the magnificent feast of his dreams being laid out before him, and he WALKS AWAY FROM IT.
Nine people ignoring it completely to fawn over th doesn't make what you did go away.
And frankly, the whole thing really is a complete mess of mischaracterization. Not that I expect you actually care. Jesse and Jaden got into bed, and nothing else matters in the entire universe. And what you did to Yubel is twice as repulsive. She is a PART OF JADEN. Throwing her to the side and treating her like crud clearly shows how little you understand *ANYTHING*.
All the information is clearly available. You're just ignoring it because it might interfere in your littl festival.
| Nina Valentine Yuki chapter 1 . 7/14/2008
great i love it and i love the lemon