Reviews for Without You
Guest chapter 1 . 4/3/2013
Great story! I really enjoyed reading something from Susan's POV, and I think you captured both Susan and Edmund very well. However, I think you might what to edit this part:

I was so shocked that it took a moment to compose myself. Edmund was so incredibly afraid, a vulnerability showing in his expression that she rarely saw anymore.

Are you as the author the narrator, or is Susan the narrator? If Susan's still the narrator, then it should say "I saw anymore." Additionally, the part where Peter appears should probably be separated with a page break. Otherwise, marvelous job!

Yours truly,
Lady Hannah
Ann chapter 1 . 11/27/2011
Amazing story! I loved it :)

By the way, I like how you have the same sibling ships as me! (No incest)

I've been in love Susan/Edmund ever since I can imagine, because Susan always defends Ed when Peter chastises him and I love Peter/Lucy ever since it was mentioned in PC that Peter's favorite sibling was Lucy.

Can you write some Peter/Lucy stories though?
OMG chapter 1 . 4/13/2009

that was...

Wildfire2 chapter 1 . 2/6/2009
LOL! I love the ending from Peter's pov it was very cute. I had to laugh when Susan kicked Edmund. Very cute!

Siriusly Loopy chapter 1 . 8/12/2008
SO SWEET! I must admit that I'm partial to Peter/Edmund brother bonding but I love a little but of Susan/Edmund in there, too. And Lucy/Edmund isn't always a bad thing either... Either way, this story was really good!
XxxHandsOnMexxX chapter 1 . 8/11/2008
Aw this is very nice.

There is not enough Susan/Edmund fluff.

Great job!
DanceOfTheEnt-Wives chapter 1 . 7/25/2008
i like it, it's like the total opposite of some of the other stories i've read. i'm glad those tow have each other. _
Capegio chapter 1 . 7/10/2008
Amen for Susan/Edmund sibling bonding fluff, of which this fandom is surprisingly void. I suppose it's because their relationship is certainly the least defined of any of them. We figure out pretty fast and Susan and Peter are like a mother/father team, that Peter will do anything Lu asks of him and that Lucy idolizes him, that Susan and Lucy are "the girls," that Edmund and Peter are brothers by more than just blood by the end of LWW. But we never really learn what the relationship between Edmund and Susan is. I liked Susan's reflections at the beginning on that in particular, because that part felt really fresh and original. Nicely done!
Livily chapter 1 . 7/9/2008
This was very nice. There's hardly any Susan/Edmund interaction on this site despite the fact that they obviously have a relatively close relationship. (If Lucy is Peter's favorite sister, then likely the other two have a similar relationship). This sort of sets up an early early preface for the Horse and His Boy. Having a younger brother myself, I liked the ending part. I always hate it when we go on vacation and the two of us get stuck sleeping in the same bed, and I swear, the kid likes to sleep horizontally. So anyhow, that unconscious interaction enhanced the brother/sister thing.
AsanteSanaSquashBanana chapter 1 . 7/9/2008
aw i love it!
claire henry chapter 1 . 7/8/2008
Yay I loved your oneshot. because right now I am wagering my own war against the onslaughter of Susan/Caspian romantic fics in this fandom since the new movie came * you know the fics that have her came back to Narnia solely because she had one kiss with Caspian now she "in love" with him. I disagree with this pairing solely, because in my opinon Susans' personality suggests that she is a logic and practial thinker; that would porbally not fall in love so quickly with somebody when she knows that she wouldn't even be able to meet them again.

So I loved that you had Susan think able their "old home" in England. because again Susans' personality drives her to relect on things like their home in England. Please write more their wonderful.
Gothic Godess chapter 1 . 7/8/2008
Aww! This was really sweet.

I've never read an Edmund/ Susan bonding fic but I really like them together.
Window2MySoul chapter 1 . 7/8/2008
That was really good. Not a lot of stories show Susan/Edmund bonding. Great job!
Salem chapter 1 . 7/8/2008
wtfh. FF ate the rest of my review. O_o
Salem chapter 1 . 7/8/2008
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