I liked the fact that Tessa didn't flip out like I thought she would, it is nice to know that her and Sousuke can get along.

Al stil makes me laugh! He just seems so much like a real human being and everything! XD

That was a sweet scene with Yang and Tessa, I feel bad for both of them. (

Uh...I don't know if its good or bad that Leonard is alive! I mean...that's good because Tessa is happy...but, I think we all know why it is a BAD thing!

Awesome chapter! I'm really looking forward to the next one!

Simply awesome! You managed to pack everything in here in a neat, well written chapter! Tessa was never one of my fave characters, but I also believe she is one of the most misunderstood of the bunch. You did an unbelievable job wringing every emotion out of her, and I love the fact that you included how she was feeling at the prospect of all her normal friends being stationed elsewhere...Bravo for the new friend in Yang! I can't wait to see how this little plot bunny developes!

Even tho I had a feeling brother dear was still alive, I can't help but wonder...is the guy indestructable or what? lol...you really need to do something about leaving those wretched, evil cliffies!

So much goodness! First, let me tell you how the current storyline is gnawing at me. Poor Sousuke!

Secondly, his chapter focused on Tessa and I'm not sure I'm fully on board with your take on her, but that's fine. Your story is wonderful and I loved the way Kaname understood Tessa's difficult love for her brother. Kudos for giving Tessa a potential OC love interest. Of course, there are a million ways that could go and I'm paranoid enough to wonder if he doesn't turn on Mithril later due to the easy treatment of his friend's killer.

Thirdly, have I mentioned that this whole story rocks? To get an update on a Friday morning put a smile on my face.

Wow! that was really good!

Frankly, I have to wonder what they could have possibly done with a flak jacket.

. Update soon! This is so good the wait kills me!

And yet another chapter well written...

Oh, and yay! maybe Tessa will get a boyfriend

and leave Sousuke alone!

(Tessa and Yang make a good pair)

LOL... go Kurz!

go kaname!

Excellent chapter.

It's good to see that Kurz and Melissa's relationship is now standing on somewhat more solid ground, yet even so they still know nothing of what actually happened with Sousuke, and he still has yet to face his fellows. Even if they know he couldn't see them, that he had no way of knowing a part of them must still be afriad of what they had seen.

I wonder, what will he be made to face now and more importantly what did Kaname see in the whispers after seeing Leonards new machine.

Good luck & best wishes,

Hououza

Magnificent chapter once again.

So, it was Leonard who lead the assault...that would explain much of what was happening and why he had been so assured that she should leave the island.

Even so, I suspect that he survived the attack much to the disappointment of Mithril no doubt. But even so we can but hope that he did not walk away uninjured.

Good luck & best wishes,

Hououza

Magnificent chapter.

Such a dreadful price to be made to pay, the double edged sword of the lambda drvier. And yet still more casualties from a foe that seems to have no end to their surprises.

I wonder, with all that is happening can they still prevail?

Good luck & best wishes,

Hououza

So I have spent the past day reading this magnificent piece of beauty, and I'm still absolutely stuck as to what to say that will convey to you how amazing I think this story is, and how much I respect you as a writer for both coming up with this, and executing it with such finesse.

I found everything in this story incredibly well done. Everyone was very in character from the very beginning, and even when changes came about, the situations you placed the characters in made it clear where these changes came about, which made everything so much more real and human for me. And that was another big thing for me: you really punched us in the gut with the fact that these characters are real and human and do real and human shit and they mess up just like the rest of us.

There was marvelous detail in the action scenes, however you kept the very human aspect of despair so prevalent that it was sometimes painful to read. Painfully beautiful, of course, but still. I'm a girl who knows nothing of war besides what I've seen on the news and in Saving Private Ryan and animes that give you just a taste of it like GW and FMP, and this illuminated things for me that I don't think I would have seen otherwise. There were so many amazing scenes in this, however when Sousuke is in the jungle and realizes that he's just taken out three of his crew members-my heart broke. Because after reading this, I feel like I KNOW him, and what it would do to him, and really, I couldn't help but cry.

But like I said, there were many amazing scenes in this story. This is the first FMP story that I've read that a Mao/Kurz relationship was effortlessly weaved with Sousuke/Kaname. And there's was a different, maturer relationship than Sousuke and Kaname's, which made it all the more amazing to read. And honestly, there's so much I can say about your Kurz/Mao, because it was amazing. I felt my heart aching in time with Kurz's, and even though I wanted Mao to stop treating him so bad, I understood why she did. Because she's so effing right: love is the easy part. Everything else mucks it up.

My favorite Kurz line:

“Bastard,” Melissa breathed as her knees threatened to give out. It was a good thing that Kurz’s other arm was holding her upright.

“Bitch,” Kurz shot back. “Do you know how fucking heartsick I’ve been over you?”

Because reallyreally, I could've had his babies then. Or yours, because that line-this whole SCENE-was amazing.

But there is something about my number one baby daddy Sousuke, because this line still sings in my heart:

I know what I'm not," Sousuke repeated slowly. "But I keep hoping that I'm enough for you. Because that's what I want. To be with you."

Again, excellent work. I can't wait to see what you have left for us with this.

Thank you for sharing your amazing talent with us,

Empath Apathique

I apologize for adding this story to my alerts and favorites before reviewing, but I was tired, so I'm reviewing now instead.

Because I am a busy person and a bit lazy of one, I don't review if the story doesn't really impress me unless I have some sort of guidance or question for the author.

Your story is amazing. Everyone is very in-character and your plot is unique. I like how you've tied events of the anime into the story to form the plot you have now. You have also melded the stories of both couples into the story without disrupting the flow or making it awkward.

I can't tell you how glad I was when Melissa finally told Kurz she loved him. I think you did an amazing job developing the relationships between the characters over a long span of chapters. This makes it more believable and far more realistic. It makes more sense that Kaname and Sousuke would end up together first, especially when you look at the end of TSR.

I did have a question, though. Perhaps this is my misunderstanding, but I thought Wraith was a girl, and I've seen you refer to him/her as both. Are you doing this because you are unsure of the gender or does it coordinate with the disguises? I'm very interested in knowing, so if you could tell me, that would be wonderful.

I feel inspired to write some FMP fanfiction now because I have seen such a lovely example of it in your story. I've really enjoyed reading it because of what I mentioned before and because you have a well-developed writing-style. I can't wait to see where this story goes next. I know life is crazy, so whenever that update happens I'll be happy. It'll be more exciting if I have to wait a long time anyway.

-SS (Super Sheba)

Leonard's actions and intentions are interesting. Makes you want to love and hate him at the same time. I also liked the Sousuke/Al conversations. Those are fun. Looks like things are getting intense! D

I was so excited to see that you updated! These 3 chapters were absolutely amazing! You really have a knack for writing the action sequences. The pacing was quick & intense (very similar to the canon), and I found myself racing through the chapters. I do have one question (comment, query?... I'm quite sure of the correct word for it), though. Tessa was pretty upset about her men, which is to be expected, but I was surprised that nothing was mentioned about how she was dealing with Leonard's demise. Anyway, again, a great job.

I love this story and I am so happy that Kurz and Mel are together :) Can't wait for the next chapter!