i really am enjoying this story, and i have noticed an improvement in your writing as the story moves along.

it's great :-) keep updating!

I'm so glad you updated! I've really fallen in love with this story, so I hope the next chapter will come up soon. -

Very nice! I'm so excited that we are finally getting to the command training! *cue fangirl-style squeels*

This is a great chapter with some great new characters. I just love Auntie! I hope we're going to see more of her. Her little "test" was so much fun. Good job!

Wow. This is a fun, fast paced story. It's well written and has the potential to go on for many chapters. I look forward to Command College and to seeing how Weber and Mao manage to keep their secret, um... secret. Nice work!

I really love this story so far! you keep them in character very well and I love the line in one of the chapters when Mao says "Just hit Weber...makes me feel better..."[something like that]

anyway. awesome story. keep it up! :D I look forward to the next chapter. :]

YAY! You updated! This fic is so interesting :-D

kool...

keep going...

I loved it! This chapter was great on so many levels. First of all, kudos to you for upping your descriptive game. It really helps this chapter feel solid, much more than the last. And the character interaction! I loved the way you handled Wraith & Kaname' conversation (the chemistry was beautiful!) and managed to, for this story at least, fill in some the blanks about Wraith's true self. The scenes with Weber were also done very well. The kiss at the end was especially brilliant (hooray for feminine intuition!). You also moved the plot forward a bit, with the whispers & the impromtu study session, though I would like to see a bit more in the coming chapters.

Oh, and if you ever have the time & inspiration, I would love to see a side story about what would've happened had Kaname actually been desperate enough for sleep to take Weber up on his "offer" to go the barracks :P

This is a great fic! You got everybody in character . Update soon please!

Oh, it gets better. Looking forward to your next update.

Okay, I like this a lot. It could use a bit more descriptive talent sometimes, but it's something that comes with practice and study, no offense. Looking forward to more from this.

Hey secret! Sorry about the anonymous review! Umm... I forgot to sign in before I read the chapter. *smacks forehead* Anyway, the really long review directly below this was from me. Sorry about the confusion.

This was a solid chapter, though it really feels more like a set-up for future chapters. Transitioning from one point to the next can sometimes be difficult. I don't have any criticsm for this chapter per se, but I do have a couple pieces of advice. Number one- don't rely too heavily on dialogue to move your story along. It can be a very effective tool, but you don't want to overdo it. Think about it in real life terms. Sure, people talk alot. But often, it's what we don't say that has the most meaning. And that brings me to my second piece of advice- remember to develop your characters. Rather than focusing on what the characters say & do, it is important to lead your readers to a point where they can feel what's going on inside the characters. We need descriptions of the small things- the little, meaningful glances, the almost imperceptible sweatdrops, the faint "doki-doki" of their heartbeats. We need to see "underneath the underneath" (sorry, lame Naruto reference). This is so hard to do effectively, but I know you can do it. You did it wonderfully in the prologue.

And as a side note- I noticed one of your reviewers giving you a bit of grief about Wraith being a girl? I have a bit to add to that. Actually, nowhere in the series so far, the anime (FMP!, Fumoffu, or TSR) or any of the manga or any of the novels (those that have been translated- officially or unofficially- into english), has a definite gender been given to Wraith. In the novel, Continuing On My Own, it was strongly hinted that Wraith was female, but it was neither confirmed or denied. People should at least get their facts straight before nitpicking on other's stories.

Well, I suppose that's enough of my rambling. I look forward to the next chapter!

I don't want to sound nit picky. But Wraith is a girl... She may be a master of disguise, but in no way is she a boy... Otherwise, good story. Everybody but Wraith is in good character.

another great chapter wonder what kaname's up to?