|Reviews for Nightmare|
| bvjhfcjngfc chapter 27 . 8/22
how many other people think that the las line might be pointing towards allen-chan being pregnant?
| Angel-Rei-chan1 chapter 8 . 9/28/2014
I speak german and I will help here :
" Sprechen sie English ? "
" Nein "
" wann kommt der nächste Zung nach Wien ? "
" In zwei Stunden "
" Danke sehr " ( or just " danke " . It's like "thank you" and "thank you very much" )
" Bitte sehr "
I hope I could help
| dcdc123 chapter 13 . 5/4/2014
This is just how I though he would find out, so yay me!
| OtakuDrag0n chapter 27 . 4/22/2014
That was really entertaining!
| Nella Hyuga chapter 27 . 4/8/2014
Oh my gorsh give me a heart attack i thought you were leaving it there for a minute! Love it btw!
| Arkytior's Song chapter 27 . 2/7/2014
Aw snap! Loved this!
| Elivira chapter 13 . 12/29/2013
XD Good revelation, I was expected Kanda to walk in on Allen in the bathroom changing of something...
| Elivira chapter 6 . 12/29/2013
Wow I really like it so far! I've noticed some problems though:
""Ie, I'm fine." he said quietly. Okay, yeah, this was most definitely weird."
I'm assuming that 'is' is supposed to be 'no' in Japanese. It is commonly assumed that it is spelled that way but the correct romanization of the word is actually 'iie' with two i's p. this so because when written in Japanese it is いいえ. い means is i, pronounced 'ee', and え is 'e', pronounced like a long 'a'. The two i's tell the reader that the 'ee' sound is longer than the single い... I really hope that the characters tat I used show up...
The second thing is that in the time period D Gray Man is set it was very im moon for a woman to be anything but a housewife on an unmarried girl, let alone a doctor. The idea of her going to school to be a softer is very unrealistic...
That's all really, other than I think you use baka too much but I think that is really just a
matter of opinion... Well anyways I really enjoy this an plan to keep reading! Please don't take offense from my criticism, I really like it when I receive criticism from my readers so I assume other writers do too...
| NightHunterDeath chapter 23 . 12/4/2013
| AliceXxX chapter 27 . 11/25/2013
b-b-b-but i don't understand the epilogue :O I thoroughly enjoyed this story! :D
| Kage no Hato chapter 1 . 8/26/2013
i wish allen wasn't a girl so i could read this story but i dont like it when allen or kanda are females...but good story idea.
| FallingBreathless chapter 27 . 5/29/2013
Strengths in your writing is progressing the plot in a quick manner and writing action parts, as in the fighting with akuma. However, I believe you will need to brush up on writing the development of romance. As a reader, I felt like the relationship between Kanda and Allen developed way too fast. At the beginning it was mostly emotional, but by the end, it became a physical one. Kanda needed more time to get in touch with his emotions and Allen time for recovering from Kanda's initial rejection: people do not just get over it that quickly...insecurity and distrust were born and need to be dealt with quickly. Also as a Japanese man, I do not think Kanda would consent to having intercourse so flippantly, and this also makes Allen seem easy. More could have been done with Lavi as I had expected a little more playfulness and a minor arc in which Lavi pretends to be with Allen to get Kanda to come in touch with his own feelings as well as feel jealous. Other than that, this was an enjoyable read. Keep writing!
| PearlesantlRose chapter 27 . 2/23/2013
I normally do not like Allen as a female. However, this was a wonderful story. I am very glad that I took the time to read it. Thank you so much for sharing.
| pikachu2510 chapter 27 . 1/27/2013
i havta say the way Kanda got 2gether w/ Allen is not wat i expected/hoped cuz it makes Allen seem easy 2 get, since Kanda said that he didnt care bout Allen, then comes 2 kiss her, also it seems like Kanda is leading her on, i think it woulda been better if Kanda said srry 1st since it doesnt make Allen seem desperate... though Kanda sayin srry is OOC... XD... at the epilogue i thought Allen was gonna say she's pregnant, i was thinkin OMG buh then i read wah really happened n i was like "Oh, well mayb next time ;p" Great story!
| Nonumaru chapter 13 . 12/29/2012
I was expecting her to be found out a lot earlier, that's for sure.