|Reviews for Bittersweet Secret|
| reader13 chapter 8 . 8/24/2008
i need to read another chapter! please update soon!
| Broken Gold chapter 8 . 8/23/2008
That was good but there are just 2 little things irking me:
As the past and present collide a son born to a Son of Adam and a Daughter of Eve will harness great power that will be craved by many. If you protect him with the heart then he shall be eternally protected. Fail to protect him and he will taken over to the darkness. Darkness shall not win.
That just kind of seemed cliche and forced to me. I don't mean to be rude but prophecies can ruin a good story sometimes.
The other thing is just the fact that zippers in Narnia doesn't make sense.
| mae-E chapter 8 . 8/22/2008
cool chapter! So she hasn't gotten so big that she can't still fit her dresses if she really struggles. just how tight is that dress? does it hint to the start of a bump around her middle? or does she still look normal? just how long till she starts to show and can't fit her dresses anymore? I would think that she might have to have a few dresses let out a bit. only has to do it without anyone knowing.
Poor girl! she took his shocked silence for rejection. How long will she be left to suffer under the wait od that misconseption, before he finally tells her how he really feels?
So peter hear a profficy about a baby he doesn't know exsits yet. will this clue him in? was that aslan's voice he heard in his head?
is this why they are getting attacked? cause people want the power that the baby is going to posess?
how much longer can she keep the secert to herslef? i would think that some creatures like the centaurs might be able to tell just by looking at her what her condtion is. they seem to know or figure things out a lot faster than the human population.
well keep up the good work!
| Guest chapter 8 . 8/22/2008
Great story... the flow is quite lovely.
| mogi93 chapter 8 . 8/22/2008
oh this chapter was amazing and so swet! :D Really really good job, I loved it a lot! Aww really awesome job!
| amethyst-dreams27 chapter 8 . 8/22/2008
Aw, short but very cute! Lol, Susan's mood swings. Your writing is very realistic with all the little details about Susan's pregnant-ness and her not being able to zip up the dress and all. Yay for you!
| reader13 chapter 8 . 8/21/2008
ARGH! come ON! get on with the story! hmm, i have a feeling everyone's going to figure out what's with susan by themselves or talking to each other. i keep thinking that edmund's going to be the last one to figure it out, or he doesn't figure it out and doesn't know until someone tells him.
| garnetred chapter 8 . 8/21/2008
Excellent chapter. I wonder why Peter was given this information and not the others? Please update soon.
| fire dolphin chapter 8 . 8/21/2008
Wow I did not see caspian acting like that. I hope things change in the next chaoter
| amethyst-dreams27 chapter 7 . 8/15/2008
Oh, a twist AND a cliffie! You have such talent! Just a suggestion, I reckon you could've cut out that last scene with Lucy and Edmund, because it kind of destroyed the impact of the cliffhanger.
| InWaterInLove chapter 7 . 8/15/2008
WE knew it was true ! ;)
Im awaiting the next chapter !
| Broken Gold chapter 7 . 8/13/2008
That was awesome but so far I'm not that fond of Crystal.
Oh and by the way, it's "OK" or "Okay" not "Ok".
| mae-E chapter 7 . 8/12/2008
this was a really cool chapter!
i loved the fact that she told him of her condition!
and that lucy could fell it when she put her arms around her sister then she must be getting close to the point where she going to start showing. just how obviuos will it be when she changes her clothes and her dresses don't fit quite right?
So the whole street got pulled in? I would think that maybe the objects got pulled in but only people that got pulled in was them. would explain how her their mother disappeared, cause she was still in the other world?
who is trying to hurt them?
well keep up the good work!
| garnetred chapter 7 . 8/12/2008
Excellent chapter. How in the world did Susan manage to get pregnant, if this is true? Was it before the coronation? During the battle with Miraz? Please update soon.
| Bundibird chapter 7 . 8/12/2008
Huh... i have to admit... this is getting weird. i'm gonna stick with it for a bit, because i'm curious to know where it goes, but yeah... its getting strange. the whole 'the pevensies street has been pulled into narnia' thing.
also, susan and peter weren't spost to return.
dont take this the wrong way, by the way - its just not quite my cup of tea. :)