As I continue to read this story, which has its gripping moments, it occurs to me that the writer does not like Peter in any way, shape or form. The story could be quite good if md1016 would simply write honestly about all the characters. It doesn't matter which character you prefer in any given story, if you are to write an honest piece, you must be fair with each character.

Another thing I like about your writing is your smooth transitions -even sometimes in the middle of a scene - from one POV to another. I can't get the hang of the omniscient. You seem to have it down.

I enjoy the effortless way you move between prose, screenwriting, and back.

This is fantastic!

I love the way you've taken it, its very original.

I may be naive but I still absolutely believe Peter is coming back.

Can't get over how brilliant the characterisation is!

NGIT

p.s. Love Siobhan and Brendan

Oh, man! This is like crack, I tell you 1

Father Mac's sending Peter to Rome? To see the pope and get all popely and not marry Assumpta?

Or should that have been Home over a bad connection?

I'm so glad you've written more! I've been waiting! I really like your style and your keeping with the integrity of the characters. They're all so much like themselves. I especially enjoy seeing the different sides of Peter and Assumpta that were only hinted at in the series. Peter is wild and irrational whenever he's afraid he's lost Assumpta and Assumpta is tender and vulnerable when she's with Peter.

But I doubt he would have left her to go to Rome without telling her in person. And I doubt she would have assumed he was whipped and was back in the clutches of the Catholic church just because he was caught - so to speak - cuddling in bed with Assumpta. However, it does make for drama and I guess concessions must be made. I can't say what I would have done at this point to heighten tension, so I suppose I can't criticize. Let's just say it's the indignation of a rabid fan always wanting her favorite characters to get and stay together. PS: I love how Niamh automatically assumes marriage, baby 1, baby 2, etc. Just like her!

That was wonderful. I can't wait for more.

This is amazing. I enjoy the present tense prose interspersed with dialogue. It's almost like Eudora Welty.

AUGHH! Gotta have MORE! Don't stop my supply of BallyKrack! I must go back and review each lovely chapter in detail.

What inspired writing. Thank you.!

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OMGG! How could you do that!

Such a great twist, love it. (As long as P&A get together in the end)

Reading this again made me wonder...Ambrose needs to step up security and catch the vandals...what if Leo were behind it? would that epedite a divorce? hm. See, I can't get them off my mind either. :)

Love this, it feels very real.

Can't wait for the next chap.

Do keep this up! you are spot-on with the characters and their feelings.