|Reviews for Look At Me, Friend|
| MLLu chapter 1 . 2/14/2010
Are you kidding me? This is absolutely great! (v) Very sweet and adorable! In my opinion you have captured everybody's personality very well. It was really refreshing to read something like that for once. The plot of the one-shot your writing skills are exceptional. Really, I mean it. The last part was simply so moving and well written, "And as for Sasuke, he just realized what it means to have a friend. Naruto didn't have to say it - Sasuke already understood. He was too much of a coward to hear it directly. But he had a friend. A friend in the person whom he once hated the most. Sasuke Uchiha was friends with Naruto Uzumaki." It was the perfect way to end your amazing little one-short. I think you should do more of these...
So glad I found your account through your youtube account (v)
Keep up the good work!(v)
| XkamikakushiX chapter 1 . 7/12/2008
Good idea, but it moved a bit too quickly, even for a one-shot.
your colorful use of adjectives and verbs is admirable, but the dialogue could use a tad bit of work, with maybe a few more pauses and such...
Also, you might want to use some more paragraphs in your stories as well. Maybe between 700-10 words total for your next one-shot. It would make the entire story seem less rushed...
All in all, it was a good one-shot, and it depicted Naruto's relationship with Sasuke quite well. I can tell that if you really put your mind to it, you could end up as an amazing writer one day.
I'll be looking forward to seeing more of your work
Best of luck,