Reviews for Another Murder
Invader-Vera chapter 1 . 11/15/2008
I liked it, and you kept Nny in character.:)
otherrealmwriter chapter 1 . 7/16/2008
This is an okay fic. I have some advice though:

Every new speaker gets their own new paragraph.

Please...don't kill me...I was only joking...really..." the captured teen choked out, mindful of the knife being held at her neck. The man only grinned wider and said, "Okay, I'm feeling flexible today. Apologize for your sickening words and I might consider only taking SOME of your blood for my wall." 'What kind of a deal is that?" Terrisa wondered more horrified of the man the more she watched.

Works better like:

"Please...don't kill me...I was only joking...really..." The captured teen choked out, mindful of the knife being held at her neck.

The man only grinned wider and said, "Okay, I'm feeling flexible today. Apologize for your sickening words and I might consider only taking SOME of your blood for my wall."

"What kind of a deal is that?" Terrisa wondered more horrified of the man the more she watched.

Just some helpful concrit there. ;)
bloody raptor chapter 1 . 7/15/2008
I thaught you did rather well on this.