|Reviews for Define 'Human'|
| Vergil Sparda chapter 1 . 5/8
| Aero.Exe chapter 1 . 10/31/2015
MY PRAYERS HAS BEEN ANSWERED A FREAKIN STORY THAT HIS PROTAGONIST IS FREAKING HALF-ANGEL HALF-DEMON HALF-HUMAN YES!
| Guest chapter 8 . 2/9/2015
DONT CRY YOUR SRORIES BEAST BEAST!
| Guest chapter 1 . 2/9/2015
akuma means demon...
| idonthaveanaxcpu chapter 1 . 10/24/2014
I don't.. What.. WHAT
ok... Kyuubi is cute... That's wierd yet awesome...
| Rayne Arianna Maranochi chapter 10 . 6/25/2014
Oh boy, hopefully this new guy isn't after those two for bad reasons or Naruto will kick his ass. Please continue.
| Rayne Arianna Maranochi chapter 1 . 6/25/2014
I vote Ino and Temari!
| Torturer-of-Souls chapter 10 . 5/23/2014
Are Ran and Hibana paired with Naruto or not?
| Wolfone10 chapter 3 . 12/25/2012
Well, this shifts the balance of power outta whack in the Naruverse... 1. No Kyuubi, no Juubi... 2. Basically God and the Devil have an interest in the kid and their daughters are here... 3. 4 BASICALLY unkillable beings walk the Earth... 4. One is a hybrid that... Quite frankly.. Is a world changer for whatever the hell purpose he decides for it.
| Wolfone10 chapter 2 . 12/25/2012
This reminds me strangely of the anime "shuffle"
| tennyogoode chapter 4 . 11/18/2012
Lol on the VC funny you pulled in this chapter i giggled as soon as i read it
| Shippuuryu chapter 10 . 1/21/2012
Ok, its a great story, I'll give you that, but it lacks...hmm what's the word... I want to say "a straight path". I commend you on showing several plots coinciding together, but there is no "definition". Set a defined path that !any! reader can follow. You write and only great readers can follow. Remember, not many teens are amazing readers! :) Also, I suggest making use of the line breakers, otherwise, two different settings combine and don't make sense, and also clearly mark a change in setting ALL the time.
For Example, in your story;
"A company of Darkwing Spirits slammed down the door to the Infinity Codex chamber."
While it tells us where they are, it doesn't tell us the region or universe/world. A better approach would be like;
"In the lower levels of Shinkai, a company of Darkwing Spirits slammed down the door to the Infinity Codex chamber located in Kami's personal vault."
That tells us EXACTLY where we are so we can follow.
Well, that's all for my advice for now, I hope you use it in future chapters. It is a good story, just needs some minor tuning.
Have a good day,
| JLR22 chapter 2 . 5/28/2011
You forgot to put what "Kirei" means man!
| Jman12394 chapter 3 . 3/20/2011
all four of them.
A hybird, a demon, an angel and a human this is going to be one screwed up story.
| narutodekenzieboy chapter 10 . 1/19/2011