Hmm, I like the premise.

I never thought about Pat [sorry, too lazy to use the Japanese name. )] going after Luna like that, but it works.

Very well written!

Alright, I'll say that I liked the concept and the way that this short was done. It was actually rather sweet. However only one thing brings it down and that is the over use of Japanese. I have nothing against the language mind, however it makes reading a bit difficult if I don't know whats being said most of the time. Its actually brings down the quality of the story a great deal, especially considering its length.

Wow interesting Triangle Love, I do enjoy it.

I really like this story~ Poor Tsukasa-kun... but yes, Subaru and Luna do belong together. Anyway, great work!