Reviews for Innocent, Vigilant, Ordinary
TrillionSchiffer chapter 25 . 6/17/2015
Gr8 scent one of the best I've seen on was until u copied . stupidIty...smgdh... u went from 100 to zero real quick.
TrillionSchiffer chapter 22 . 6/17/2015
Finally some relief from all the back and forth. This is was progress looks grief Charlie Brown
TrillionSchiffer chapter 21 . 6/17/2015
21 chapters deep... I know this a a slow build but dammmmnn. AND you're on Hiatus? Good why did I even start.
TrillionSchiffer chapter 9 . 6/17/2015
This version gives a much better reason why Jake would put up as might 'fight' as he did. Now Bella is the girl that got away. SM's version was SMGDH horrible. It made no sense that he would go as far as he did. I wish i had incorporated 'this' in my own story. SMH.
IsabellaEdward17 chapter 35 . 6/9/2015
The way you explain the story is amazing... It's unreal yet it feels like it's really happening... I dunno how to explain... ND I dunno you're even reading it or not but just please try to update and finish the story... There are people out there who really appreciate it... Please try n update
Guest chapter 35 . 5/19/2015
That is what Edward should be like.
SeekerNewbie chapter 33 . 4/21/2015
Hi, I know this story is on hiatus, and I don't usually read WIP because I hate not knowing how it ends. But I'm glad I read what you have done with this one. I've really enjoyed it. The characters are great, the angst is believable and not over done. I really hope you finish it and post it for us to read. You write very well.
marley01 chapter 35 . 3/10/2015
I can't believe this is not finished, i love love love this story. Please finish it, your writing is beautiful
jk chapter 16 . 3/5/2015
I don't get bella...she shoulda just said um no thanks I don't do pity lunches asshole...then moved the FUCK ON
jk chapter 14 . 3/5/2015
see what I mean? he fucking puts himself in her life...talking to her, giving her that application, saving her from falling cause shes a idiot, walking her home, and then he says they cant be friends but aquintences...their alreadythat. bella should have just told him to fuck off right there and then just forget about his stupid ass...hes boring as shit too
jk chapter 12 . 3/5/2015
theres bella again being all stupid...and It is kinda selfish of her to apply to Dartmouth knowing jake cant and wont leave ya know...if jakes her life and if she loves him like she says the stupid selfish little bitch would just go to ya shes fucking selfis.h...pooooor jake
jk chapter 11 . 3/5/2015
is that Edward flirting? bella making a big deal about not caring about her birthday...she just comes off as a ungreatful bitch by the way...and Edward saying happy birthday
god I could fucking be watching paint dry right now and itd be better then this bullshit
your versions of bella and Edward kinda suck
jk chapter 10 . 3/5/2015
cryptic? fucking hardly
it was just boring small talk like usual
and again Edward was dick and I don't know why th stupid little fan girl likes him so much
jk chapter 9 . 3/5/2015
whats with Edward being a smirky dick?
isn't bella is mate? then why is he acting like hes trying to piss her off?
and why in the fuck does bella like him so much? hes given exactly zero reasons to like him! fuck him
bella and jake!
jk chapter 7 . 3/5/2015
what the point here? you have her in "love" with jake...but whats the point if it changes nothing?
she hasn't fucked jake...shame really
and she still wants edweird the second she sees him, still obsecces over him like the little idiot fangirl she is...and blushes cause she read "kisses her" on a play script their reading...whats the point of making her experienced if she isn't experienced? and if her feelings for jake make no fucking difference?
again what the hell is the point? ohh so its just twilight but a shittier version...nice
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