Reviews for Innocent, Vigilant, Ordinary
Guest chapter 35 . 6/24/2014
Actually your just not a good writer at all. Nothing new to say and what is said is poorly done. Plot is cliche & trope ridden. Pacing is at best inconsistent and the dialog is choppy and trite. Also your bias is glaringly obvious. This isnt a fleshed out story, its your mary sue world - and its one of the worst of a bunch of crappy twilight fanfics
I'm so thrilled you put this on hiatus as its beyond painful to read. Please find a new hobby. Writing is just not something your good at
Guest chapter 1 . 6/15/2014
The other day I was thinking through the canon Twilight, and I was racking my brain trying to figure out which part of the book the scene between Jacob, Billy, and Bella was in- where Bella defends the Cullens against Billy and calls him a bitter old man. Anyways, it took me quite a while to fully realize that it was in THIS story rather than the actual book. I like this better, actually. So naturally, I'm going to read it for like the 4th time.

Thank you.
YellowFlowers1922 chapter 35 . 6/3/2014
When are you going to update? I like this story
Marie Mermaids chapter 35 . 5/9/2014
I loved the story. Thank you. Wished there was more. You really should write more stories. Are there any of your stories in other platforms?
Marie Mermaids chapter 7 . 5/9/2014
' reed propelled by the wind' and one legged rabbit. I so enjoyed that
Katie chapter 35 . 5/6/2014
Please please please please please continue with this story. It's fantastic
Guest chapter 35 . 4/17/2014
I loved your story. I found it interesting and addictive. THIS should have been the original Twilight story!
bella-swan25 chapter 35 . 4/17/2014
Are you ever going to finish this story?
Tandr23 chapter 35 . 4/17/2014
do you plan to continue?
Princessisabella chapter 25 . 4/15/2014
You. Write. An. Amazing. Story...You are even more talented in story writing than SM...plz plz consider publishing this book...I promise you that even if we go bankrupt, I will surely buy a copy of this book...I had never before imagined Bella's life this way..and trust me when I say, you make it more amazing than the story written by SM. Please inform me of your other books...I really love your writing style...never said this to anyone:Love you! And hats off to you...
ShadyLowinnski chapter 35 . 3/20/2014
I knew that reading this fan-fiction was going to be a HUGE mistake. I almost never read fanfics that are not complete simply because I don't want to have to wait years before they decide to try and add more chapters. In most cases the author forgets entirely about the story. I hope that's not what happened here but still.

You are leaving us here, lost. Just like Edward did to Bella in the field. When you write, I can honestly say it's like nothing I have ever seen After all these years reading. Your style and story are simply breath-taking and beautiful.

I doubt you may ever see this but if you do, please please please write again. I have honestly become hooked on this story. It is kind of a part of me now. I know that may seem over the top but it is. I need it to survive.
Mayuri love cullens chapter 35 . 3/8/2014
Its a great story :)
cela chapter 9 . 2/19/2014
so Jacob wants bella to stay in forks until he graduates from high school? and then what? marry him and spend her life on the reservation popping out three or four kids ? Jacob and bella don't have ANYTHING in common, other than they both live in forks.
cela chapter 7 . 2/19/2014
I don't think they quite know what to do with their attraction to each other. bella is under the impression that what she feels for Jacob is "true love" and poor Edward has no idea what is happening to him. hopefully alice will "see" it and tell him soon. of course, being Edward he will undoubtedly deny it.
ylene chapter 1 . 2/21/2014
Hi! would you like to read my story? that would make me really happy :)
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