|Reviews for If the Black had been White|
| BelieverofManyThings chapter 2 . 3/24/2013
Great chapter :-D Looking foward to your next update :-D
| Flar chapter 2 . 5/31/2009
UPDATE THIS FIC DAMMIT! I WANNA KNOW WHAT HAPPENS NEXT TT_TT IT'S AMAZINGZINGZING! MUCH LOVE TO THE PEOPLE!
| Gigei chapter 2 . 5/2/2009
Oh, that author's note at the end made me laugh. It's so sweet having a cute little toddler Sephiroth!
| empirical Dharma chapter 2 . 12/13/2008
Glad to see the continuation of this fic! It shows much promise!
| ReplicaRiku'sgirl chapter 1 . 10/2/2008
Child talk is impressive.
| Ranea chapter 1 . 8/6/2008
Interesting premise. A few things:
1. Proofread as well as spell-check. I saw a few words (editions, array, restrains) that should have been otherwise written (additions, awry, restraints). The mix-ups distract from the story more than the misspellings would.
2. Be careful about the use of parentheses within the descriptive text. It is often better to break the sentences out than to have asides within longer sentences. They border on becoming run-ons.
That's really it. Otherwise, it's a good plot, though it seemed a bit short. I was looking for more! So I guess that means you should update soon ;)
| Kragoth chapter 1 . 7/23/2008
Good fic. I think this has a lot of potential.
| empirical Dharma chapter 1 . 7/18/2008
Interested to see where you will take this.