Reviews for Total Eclipse of the Heart
EdwardsFirstKiss chapter 5 . 8/14
Loved the chapter and UST b/t Edward and Bella.
EdwardsFirstKiss chapter 4 . 8/14
I just don't understand how Carmen could be so callous.
EdwardsFirstKiss chapter 3 . 8/14
Loved the chapter. I hope that Edward and Bella acknowledge their attraction to each other. And Libby is adorable. As I read this in 2023, I had to laugh at the iPod. Gosh! They were the bomb back then. How far we have come technologically.

You both have great writing skills and compliment each other.
EdwardsFirstKiss chapter 2 . 8/14
This is a reread and I love it. I remember how much I fell in love with Libby Bug!
EdwardsFirstKiss chapter 1 . 8/14
This is a re read for me, so I am not sure I can post a review. But love both POVs.
browneyedgirl73 chapter 21 . 8/3
So…just like that a SWAT commander is going to send a person into a volatile situation untrained and unprotected? This just gets worse and worse. I honestly like the story plot. But this swat incident, then the whole Carmen/Carlisle thing, then the fact that they just brushed right over how Edward had hurt Bella with his worlds about her not being Libby’s mother and her just saying, “oh yeah well that hurt but me leaving you because you said it was so much worse”. I’m having a hard time hanging with this story.
browneyedgirl73 chapter 16 . 8/3
Hmmm… it seems that they don’t really “deal” with tough situations, they just distract each other when they are brought up. I think the Carlisle thing is a biggie. Not dealt with yet, but maybe in the future. And so, like, he is back in med school but he’s just going to cart back off to Hawaii? How does that work? Some things just aren’t making sense and not adding up in the plot.
L-Anne Cullen chapter 1 . 7/4/2022
Umm Edwards POV is kinda but I am a female Marine so I guess I'm used to more manly grunting as they talk... So hahahahaha
Madison Elliott chapter 1 . 5/27/2021
Loved it
Jenycullen chapter 1 . 4/28/2021
Love love loved it!
QueenGB chapter 3 . 2/11/2020
I love Edward (team Edward all the way) but this one seems disconnected somehow. Somethings are unclear. Did Edward leave SWAT for good because of Liam? Why was Edward taking his daughter to Bella’s when she could have stayed with her grandparents? Why is he staying at Bella’s? Why is he sleeping on the floor? I thought she had a large place? I guess I’m disconnected somehow.
Guest chapter 9 . 7/27/2019
Too much usage of the word "juices" . That was vile and I don't think I'll ever think of that word the same way ever again.
ChristyWIX chapter 4 . 10/18/2018
Why would Edward be so forward and just walk into Bella's bathroom like that? I know she said his name and that it turned him on, but he works for her. There is such a thing as privacy. She could've been mortified about that. It is risky of them to be expressing that they are attracted to one another in front of Libby. She already is asking both her dad and Bella to get married. I really liked Bella and Libby making pancakes together. Very cute. His flashback was interesting. Carmen, huh? Well, at least you answered one of the questions. She left with signing away her parental rights, so that is good news. Wonder why they would get married if one wanted children and the other did not? Strange. My hubs and I happily went the childfree route. We love children, just did not want them for our own. We borrow the nieces and nephews when we need our fix and then give them back, spoiled and tired.
ChristyWIX chapter 3 . 10/18/2018
Well, with Edward having Bella and all her friends over to Libby's party, her stalker may have followed them. He/she did mention they are always watching. Now, they've taken Libby back to Bella's house for the night. I hope nothing awful happens to Libby, as a result of a lunatic thinking Bella is 'his/hers'. That would be horrific. Why did I get the feeling that it may be Jacobs himself that is doing this? Bella thought he looked familiar. If he has been in the background of her surroundings, she may have seen him here or there. Therefore, making him familiar. Edward said 'ex co-worker' when looking at Jacobs. Did he get fired from SWAT because of what happened to Liam? It was not mentioned. Why would Edward have to spend the night at Bella's, if he did not sleep there the night before?
ChristyWIX chapter 2 . 10/18/2018
Seems Edward did not mind the attention Mackenzie was showing him. That would make sense, as he is a single man and she was flirting. I am sure many a BxE fan were grumbling about that but, they are not a couple, he is working for her. It was cute that they all agreed to go to Libby's birthday party.
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