Reviews for Total Eclipse of the Heart
TwiFanatic16 chapter 2 . 6/23/2012
Edward is sexy! Great chapter!
TwiFanatic16 chapter 1 . 6/23/2012
I loooves me a hot ass kicking daddyward. Already fell in love with this story!
Kir224 chapter 1 . 5/30/2012
I really wanted to give this story a chance. But just could not get through the first two chapters. The story was fine until EPOV and then all I could focus on was how different the writing styles were. To me this really hurt the flow. Also, I would encourage you to use contractions. Real people don't talk so formally. This really interrupted the whole story for me. I tried to overlook it...but couldn't. This isn't a flame, just some honest feedback.
Nickel1903 chapter 2 . 5/28/2012
I love the flow of your chapters, the change of POV's are really perfect.
LOLO 5-0 chapter 3 . 4/9/2012
Awe she kissed him he defended her honor.
LOLO 5-0 chapter 2 . 4/8/2012
So she has a crush on Edward but again thinks so little of her self that she wouldn't be able to keep his attention because he's a beautiful man that all women want an she's just boring,Baby girl doesn't realize she's got it all.
LOLO 5-0 chapter 1 . 4/8/2012
Ok Edward's a good dad and friend so who Libby's mother,and Bella is a sweet loving girl devoted to her friend,who's an actress an just wants to be normal.
Marie chapter 7 . 3/31/2012
Très bon chapitre.

Je voulais vous signaler qu'il y a des fautes dans la partie en français du texte ;)

C'est "Avez-vous des réservations?

Oui nous en avons, au nom de Cullen".

xo
BiteMePlz221 chapter 22 . 3/21/2012
Wow! That was fantastic! I luuuuv how u added their life after the main part of their story. It was really interesting. Thx so much for the great story!
bookworm2341 chapter 22 . 3/6/2012
I loved this story! It's wad amazing
babybaby15 chapter 22 . 2/22/2012
I loved your story a lot
bronzed topaz chapter 22 . 1/26/2012
I'm heartbroken that this story is over. It means I have to go and find something else to read! I don't want to, not after this story. How can anything be as entertaining. The story itself was captivating, with the romance, the drama and the funny parts, but the author notes were like a second story within the story. I love author notes like yours.

You both did an amazing job writing this story together. Your writing styles really match each others. And did I mention I love the author note banter?

Thank you both for writing and sharing this story with us all. God knows it would have taken perseverance!
bookworm231 chapter 11 . 1/1/2012
hahahahaha ooh that was great! love the talk that poor Eddie had with Ben, hahaha
missylb chapter 22 . 12/19/2011
brill story loved it as usual with yours xx
musical dolphin11 chapter 11 . 12/15/2011
i really think that is adorable with edward overreacting to libby telling him that jj is her boyfriend. i think all dads react that way when their daughter brings home a boyfriend for the first time.
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