Reviews for Comatose Marik and Malik
peppermint-spite chapter 1 . 7/5/2013
Is Marik losing his mind?

I like the ending, how he realizes it can't be real because of the rain. So sad though. Even though he tried to kill all the main characters, he still deserves a happy ending.
Mittzy chapter 1 . 7/23/2008
cool fic
Cliscia chapter 1 . 7/21/2008
Interesting. I love fics like this where

Malik realizes that Mariku is needed.

Short, but nice.

Here's my crit:

I don't think Malik would let himself be beaten up as

a kid. He's a pretty fiesty kid, and not a pushover.

Second, Malik Mariku. Mariku is Malik. Mariku is not a seperate

entity from Malik, but his own personality disorder.

This isn't anything against you, just a little long lasting

qualm of mind.

Mariku isn't a yami. He is Malik's personality disorder.

And your use of dub names like Ishizu and Odeon don't fit in

well with the sub names like Malik and Mariku.

Despite that, good job.