|Reviews for Comatose Marik and Malik|
| peppermint-spite chapter 1 . 7/5/2013
Is Marik losing his mind?
I like the ending, how he realizes it can't be real because of the rain. So sad though. Even though he tried to kill all the main characters, he still deserves a happy ending.
| Mittzy chapter 1 . 7/23/2008
| Cliscia chapter 1 . 7/21/2008
Interesting. I love fics like this where
Malik realizes that Mariku is needed.
Short, but nice.
Here's my crit:
I don't think Malik would let himself be beaten up as
a kid. He's a pretty fiesty kid, and not a pushover.
Second, Malik Mariku. Mariku is Malik. Mariku is not a seperate
entity from Malik, but his own personality disorder.
This isn't anything against you, just a little long lasting
qualm of mind.
Mariku isn't a yami. He is Malik's personality disorder.
And your use of dub names like Ishizu and Odeon don't fit in
well with the sub names like Malik and Mariku.
Despite that, good job.