Cute story, very funny. Klutzy Bella, insecure Edward love them always.

wow

I love it.

Poor frustrated Edward. Hopefully he won't be for too much longer. :) Bella either.

Hopefully they can find relief in each other. LOL

Oh no...

So funny!

Oh gosh...SO GOOD!

Oh dear...I would die. I couldn't stand there and just watch something like that. I'm a prude. I admit it freely. Totally a prude.

Anyway, nice work. Totally gripping and I'll be stuck here reading forever now. Thanks for that. :)

You were pimped out! So here I am...to read your work. I'm intrigued. For sure. :)

I don't think I've ever read an Angela POV...what a sweet girl. :)

Nice work.

Love Secretary! Thank you, I am still laughing.

Fun story... Looking forward to reading. I am setting it up top read on my phone so I can review from there. Thanks for sharing!

wow, you sure write a lot in a chapter

i like long chapter

great story.

Now I'm pissed. I actually wrote maybe the first actually GOOD REVIEW EVER for you guys and FF picked that moment to crap out. UUgh. If I can recap the last chapter, I really like what you've done with Rose. It's smart...really liked the bondage. Most writers don't give her her due, but you did, and I like that.

Of course what I wrote before being so RUDELY INTERRUPTED was more along the lines of Tolstoy, but oh well... Wait- I do remember saying something about not letting the horndogs get to you ie: Edward and Bella. I can wait...I'm so very tired of Edward smelling things...running after Bella just to fuck everything up...This story so far has been a breath of fresh air...so keep it going.

Love the plot. Not a fan of the dialog, but I agreed to let that go,IF YOU PROMISE ME...that the next time around you'll work on that. If you promise, I'll contain myself. If you want an example (I make my own docs with track changes...I can show you what I mean) (But you have to ask first..I don't give unsolicited advice.)

I'm a great editor with a lot of experience, but generally only with academic papers. I don't beta, but I do work with a few ff authors I like, with stories I care about...hence, no beat out for hire. I'm picky.

That's really mean! Yeah , yeah...sure, sure...I know you know what you're doing, and I REALLY like your Rose. Not too much RPOV in fanfic, and your was really hot. Like Emmet, too. Nice tough with the bondage...maybe you have an outtake posted somewhere?

Still playing dialog Nazi, though. GAH! A girl can't help it.

Okay. I know this story is complete, which makes leaving reviews a complete cluster fuck. It's a GOOD STORY. So many nice things here, and I especially like that Emmet is not a lost cause and Rose is actually thinking about something besides herself. So many fics just lose it here...

I still have a serious problem with the dialog. Again, not what they say, but how they say it. And again, it's not a simple as peppering everything with contractions. It's about the characters and the flow...everything in it's own place, to make the story work.

I'll stop. It's done, so either I like it or I shut the hell up. It just frustrates me, because with a little bit more I'd be totally happy as a reader. And please know I leave these comments as a reader, not some vindictive writer looking to score. I don't write, and I have the upmost respect for those who do. Thank you-.

Love BxJ! too bad you didn't let that go a little more...love the plot, still have my reservations about the dialog. But not stopping me- thank you for the story!