|Reviews for The Search For The PowerStones|
| Emerald Divinity chapter 2 . 7/28/2008
Okay... well again with the caps, try other things like bold or underlining it.
When there are different quotes try separating them with a space so it's easier to read and differiate the people that are talking, is that okay? Sorry if I seem to be harsh.. I just want to make sure you flourish right as a writer!
For flashbacks why not italicized it or line break it or something? Your author notes too!
Anyway 'til next time!
| Emerald Divinity chapter 1 . 7/28/2008
Well, first off interesting crossover! I love CLAMP's Tsubasa and I've played Power Stone before so yeah.
Let's see... to help improve your writing, I say spell the whole thing out and don't go all texty like and everything. Pretend it's really going to be published as a book and everything! Next, caps are good and all, but emphasizing could be done in bolds as well..
As for the battle scenes you say you can't write well... Try them out! It'll help improve your writing and everything, because at first you don't succeed, try, try again!
I'll be waiting for the next chapters!