Reviews for Mother
Serpent at Sunset chapter 1 . 7/25/2008
As soon as I started reading, I was hooked. You can really sympathize with the lack of love in Malik's life especially from a mother. Your writing style is very polished and elegant-poetic even. I enjoyed reading it!
Cliscia chapter 1 . 7/24/2008
Soz it's Yao-Ling from DevianTART.

Mm, ... I didn't know you had one.

Anyway, here's my review.

I love psychology. I play on it often in my stories

and Mariku is such a damn interesting character.

Whether you want to see him as the personality disorder of Malik,

or a completely different person from Malik, either way,

the idea of 'mother' is very interesting for him.

I love how have him seem a bit sane,

contrasting how he tries to cut his forehead.

I suppose that if you want to think of it this way,

there's a lot of sociology behind it. The idea

that society has created that a person /needs/ a mother.

Maybe this is why Mariku is lost, since he knows he doesn't have

one, and yet he should.

But then that's going into his mindset and psyche again,

which you portrayed wonderfully.

But I'm suprised you didn't put Malik in this!

Malik is his true parent, the person who created him.

I was expecting you to fit Malik in like that somehow,

and was suprised when you didn't.

But, oh well.

Great oneshot. Definant fave.

-brain turn to mush? you must not have ready any of my fanfictions-

I'm pretty big into writing, so with all

of my reviews, I give crit.

Because there can always be crit no matter who

writes it.

Um, his 'mother' wouldn't use the honorific 'kun'

when she says

"Oh but I am your mother Malik-kun" since they're

Egyptian, not japanese.


And the sun is the sun. It is not Ra rising et cetera.

Mariku doesn't believe in religion,

and the only Ra in his life is the card.

And the eye on his forhead is not the

eye of horus, it's the Wadjet eye.

Other than that, I loved it.
Spidey meets Wizard-Theif chapter 1 . 7/24/2008
Wow... That was really sad. I almost started crying. The poor guy. Awesome job!

TheRealGhostBustersWriter chapter 1 . 7/24/2008
WAH That- that :sniff: THAT WAS SO SAD! But it was good too.