Ooh! I think our heroine has made her entrance!

Happy writing to you!

Wow! You said you wrote this when you were 12? I think its good so far!

I like it how you started off the story with the good ol' "Redwall feel" by having a bunch of excited Dibbuns begging for a story.

Happy writing to you!

... "the Ruthless" makes so much more sense now.
How did Gareth survive?!

-excited pointing- I recognized Tammo's dark as soon as you mentioned the buckle!
I always have loved the hares, so I'm glad to hear that the trio will play major roles!
Lin accidentally entering the forbidden room... should have see that one.

I really like all your poems.

Ye-es! I really, really wanted a Redwall book with good "vermin," so I cant wait go see where this goes!
Harm them to help them, hm? I'm curious now...
I'm going to go out on a limb and guess that the mystery squirrel is the first Lin?

That was a very Jacques-style poem, I'd say.
I love Dauncey. XD

Mm, yeah, I'd say that "Ruthless" fits. An otter tries to escape? "Drown him."

-sits with the Dibbuns-
I'm ready!

Uh, what happened to the story back at Redwall with Melanda? After chapter 41 there was nothing but Lin's story. I just want to know what happened there.

This was such a tough book to read. It started out strong and kept my attention. But pretty soon it seems you lost interest or a view on where it was going. The Melanda storyline could have made for an interesting side plot. But The dream sequences were awkward at best. Slavrave went from beating characters and starving them to trying to kill the main character and they were still joking and good afterwards... what? All interactions with Lin and the bad guys were weird. I think you need to work on character development more.

the meeting is kinda like Lord of the rings

of course Melanda fights well, her father and his best friend are highlander's (OK in Tam's case it's borderlands but still) anyway your doing a great job and I love this story, I really hope Lin gets to stay with Tam and Armel but yeah your doing Awesomely and I love this story

I have to pause in my reading, but this is an awesome story so far and well written. Might become one of my Ultimate favorites!

Ave Maria! Viva Christo Rey!

I personally loved it. Vrel's upset that he won't get a chance at Lin though. ;D I want to personally thank you for this story. It's given me many hours of entertainment, and alot of inspiration. And it made me cry, which has only happened maybe... 2 other times out of the thousands of books and fanfics I read. I really can't say much other then that, so, just, Thank you.