Reviews for Pornography Revised
Gemini.L.Beatrice chapter 1 . 5/14/2011
Great story...update soon :)
orange cotton candy chapter 1 . 7/25/2009
this story is really good i can't wait for the next chapter
Alenko chapter 1 . 11/30/2008
:D write fast!
piltad chapter 1 . 11/12/2008
Well I come from the great site of SIYE rarely ever come to FF but for you I had to... I read your Janus project story that was an amazing story something very few people would be able to make but unfortunately you guys abandoned it so I am here now to read all your stories and bug you about Janus LOL...

I really hope this wasn't just a one shot. This was dark yes which I love. There really isn't to many dark/angst type stories out there and even fewer that are actually good. Yours on the other hand is amazing I really do love it. I really loved all your ideas this chapter is full of original ideas. And that is something to be treasured. I really liked the idea of Bella not just capturing them but has also taken down all the Weasley brothers as well. And the idea of Dumbledore snatching them up and teaching them from such a young age. You really do have skills and hope you continue on with your writing and would be even happier if you took some of it to SIYE ;)

Till next time,


P.S Long live the Janus Project ;)
yamihime chapter 1 . 8/22/2008
ur stories r so awsome plz contine

2 lazy a 2 logi
Loyd1957 chapter 1 . 8/5/2008
Yes, it's dark. There are those stories that delve into the human reality of death, war and sick people. Reading this first chapter was like sitting on pins and needles wondering what Bellatrix was actually going to do. Harry hung tough, but can Ginny really. Will they endure weeks, months or years of torture? Let's find out.
girlspell chapter 1 . 7/27/2008
I read your original chapter at SIYE, and I thought it had great protential.

This verision you used your strong suit, imagry. Quite powerful and fused the atmosphere of the story. Another big improvement was the narrative.

Looking forward very much for more. Keep writing. You have the talent.
CruciareMors chapter 1 . 7/26/2008

First of all, let me say that I'm not here to stalk you or anything like that. I take no joy in making people angry or annoyed at me. That said, I must reiterate that I love your writing and was very surprised when I visited your page and found out you had rewritten this story, which you know I loved the first time around, in spite of everything.

It now sounds less raw, for lack of a better word (although I guess that, following the original plotline, there's still much more to come when it comes to torture). I like the idea of an older Harry and an older Ginny. They're mature enough to know what love is and seem to know they can't escape Bellatrix, even Harry, who is playing the tough guy. The characters are human enough for the reader to sympathise with them, and they don't seem to be inflexible. I can almost psysically sense Ginny's fear in this chapter. Bellatrix seems very human too, though jaded and sadistical. There's an air of cold calculism about her, but she also seems excited in her own depraved yet controlled way. You write her very well.

I couldn't help but notice your introductory note, and I think I should say this: it's better to find a creative outlet for a depressive state than to not find an outlet at all. I don't know what state of mind you're in now, nor do I think you'd tell me, but all the same, I must tell you I think raging against this kind of darkness that seems to suck one into it and never want to let go is the best one can do. Seriously.

I wish you all the best and look forward to the rest of this rewrite.
rosebud93 chapter 1 . 7/26/2008
I love this story so far and I can't wait to see what happens next, you have a good writing style and the way you word things makes the story so much darker (which is a good thing). Update soon!
goddessa39 chapter 1 . 7/25/2008
What a name.

Well, the AU is interesting and I like how they take comfort in the other.