|Reviews for The Death of a Lover|
| Princess Maki chapter 1 . 4/10/2012
| Paradoxismminant chapter 1 . 7/29/2009
Hm...not too bad. Too many commas, though.
And it's called a hitai-ete...not a haite...
| Kerayzie chapter 2 . 10/18/2008
I really like this. You should do more!
You didn't really need to point out the points at the end though cos they were put across quite well in the chapter, don't worry.
So all in all it was good, I really wanted to read more. With the exception of a few words in wrong places and difficult grammer I liked it. I sometimes have the same problem so I wont hold it against you :D It's hard to stop writing when you're on a roll.
Anyway, rambling now, so yeah...
Great little story though...do more, do more!
| Balverine chapter 2 . 10/1/2008
;; dat was so sad
I love and hate things like this
i love them because in sort of a bittersweet wat, they're endearing and it makes u think that tomorrow is not always promised
I hate them cuz it makes me cry like a baby
seriously, after reading the line, "I'll see you tomorrow." I cried.
Seems like a dumb reason to get teary, but that's how i am is all...
I even cried when Roxas said "I guess my summer vacation's over."
D: awez, now i'm crying again!
Well i only usually review stories i deem worthy and yours was exceptionally so.
Beautiful and well thought ou drabble, even if it isn't finshed..[is it o.o cuz i coulda swore u said it wasn't] anywho... it was a good read.
| Roman C Lee chapter 2 . 9/2/2008
Yeah, what you pointed out in your A/N did come across in the story, to me at least. I really enjoyed reading this, and not only for perverted reasons! lol, the irony of the second chapter, the angst of the first, and the combination of the two really made for a great story. I like that you posted the chapters in this way; it gives a new perspective for the story that you don't see a lot. Truly original and AWESOME - Thanks for writing this!